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A familiar "hello"
All dressed up in deceit, It's an instant attraction.
I glare down at my feet, what a nervous reaction.
She burns through my thoughts, I prepare for the worst.
My stomach in knots, I fumble my words.
I approach this with caution, for i've been here before.
And I haven't forgotten beauty lures me to war.
In a fiery trance I don't want it to show,
but averting my glance I dodge this hello.
I glare down at my feet, what a nervous reaction.
She burns through my thoughts, I prepare for the worst.
My stomach in knots, I fumble my words.
I approach this with caution, for i've been here before.
And I haven't forgotten beauty lures me to war.
In a fiery trance I don't want it to show,
but averting my glance I dodge this hello.
Published 18th Oct 2018
Author's Note
Accurate description of my distorted view of a pretty encounter.
I dodged a bullet, but it was a shiney bullet.
I dodged a bullet, but it was a shiney bullet.
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18th Oct 2018 3:21am
18th Oct 2018 3:30am
It looked super short when I finally typed it on here.
I guess i'm straight and to the point. without the straight part. lol
I guess i'm straight and to the point. without the straight part. lol
18th Oct 2018 3:39am
Don't worry so much about length a poem doesn't have to be a book. But a complete thought or feeling, yes
23rd Oct 2018 3:56pm
hellos and goodbyes, are mostly the only words I could utter out.... so many beautiful women; so many things that pull me in different directions.... the least of my worries is rejection, though that alone does an abundance of damage to my soul(I'm not proud to say that I'm a very sensitive person).... I shamefully practically shut down at the sight of a "beautiful woman", that may or may not be more or less as mentally self destructive as I am (which for me is most times....)that picture suits this poem perfectly....I feel this.
Thank you for elaborating a bit further into it. Depth is greatly appreciated here. I loved the flow of that comment!
