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Adrift
Do you
feel adrift
within this sea of chaos
watching your shoreline
of razor sharp rocks
with your
ship
that is slowly sinking
with the weight
of all your
Excess baggage
that you find hard
to throw
Overboard
feel adrift
within this sea of chaos
watching your shoreline
of razor sharp rocks
with your
ship
that is slowly sinking
with the weight
of all your
Excess baggage
that you find hard
to throw
Overboard
Published 15th Oct 2018
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15th Oct 2018 9:53am
Great poem ... short crisp lines ... wonderful line breaks ... "Excess baggage" ... love how you capitalized excess ... "that you find hard/to throw/overboard" ... brings it all home ...
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