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Another Gaze
I gaze like there is no tomorrow
as I drown in her delicate blue
those eyes, those beautiful eyes
beseeched before me
a pendant of patience
and peace, begging
of me to pounce
the day pauses
unannounced
in awe of her artistic
verve and vitality
we both share a stare
in wonder as minds wander
into unwritten pages, awaiting
to be fused together tonight
as I drown in her delicate blue
those eyes, those beautiful eyes
beseeched before me
a pendant of patience
and peace, begging
of me to pounce
the day pauses
unannounced
in awe of her artistic
verve and vitality
we both share a stare
in wonder as minds wander
into unwritten pages, awaiting
to be fused together tonight
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Re. Another Gaze
14th Oct 2018 4:15pm
"delicate blue" ... love that ... the sound ... the originality of it ... "verve and vitality" ... nice alliteration ... wonderful "w"s in the final stanza brings it all home ... bravo JT ...
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Re. Another Gaze
14th Oct 2018 4:27pm
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Re. Another Gaze
Anonymous
15th Oct 2018 00:18am
Very nice writing my friend!!
You're a romantic dude!
Great job.
MZ.
You're a romantic dude!
Great job.
MZ.

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15th Oct 2018 1:38am
Re. Another Gaze
Anonymous
15th Oct 2018 00:22am
Hey Tim! You're failing miserably at taking that Dork of the Week title from me! Lol.
MZ.
MZ.

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Re. Another Gaze
Anonymous
16th Oct 2018 9:19am
I do believe you found something beautiful, Tim. And brought a glimpse of it here in gorgeous imagery :-)

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16th Oct 2018 2:45pm
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Anonymous
16th Oct 2018 2:47pm
Dammit...I'm sending hugs and hopes this doesn't mean what it sounds like...

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16th Oct 2018 2:49pm
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Anonymous
16th Oct 2018 7:28pm
Eyes ahead, my friend. Don't look backward. That's not the direction you're going 😊

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