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Muddle Of My Mental
Silken words drip from this soliloquy
the heartbeats, the feeling, the care
in the muddle of my mental
alone you are there
and I can't help but stare
a glimmer, a shine
a chilled glass of wine
holding on to each sense
in this battle with time
thou beauty beholds
as these chapters unfold
page upon page
look after look
burns this firey glow
in a passion we took
in actions, in thought
spoke thru the heart
life and her wonders
so simple, so smart
the heartbeats, the feeling, the care
in the muddle of my mental
alone you are there
and I can't help but stare
a glimmer, a shine
a chilled glass of wine
holding on to each sense
in this battle with time
thou beauty beholds
as these chapters unfold
page upon page
look after look
burns this firey glow
in a passion we took
in actions, in thought
spoke thru the heart
life and her wonders
so simple, so smart
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Anonymous
8th Oct 2018 2:23pm
Ahhh, this tickles the senses quite beautifully. Lovely poetry first read of the day
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Anonymous
8th Oct 2018 5:30pm
Tim,
Nice write, my friend(yes, I'm speaking like a poet now. lol).
Cut it out, though, because you're making all of us dorks look bad! LOL!
Very nice writing.
MZ.
Nice write, my friend(yes, I'm speaking like a poet now. lol).
Cut it out, though, because you're making all of us dorks look bad! LOL!
Very nice writing.
MZ.
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8th Oct 2018 5:48pm
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Anonymous
8th Oct 2018 5:49pm
Don't sell yourself short, young man, you're a fine writer.
MZ.
MZ.
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Anonymous
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8th Oct 2018 6:50pm
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8th Oct 2018 8:19pm
I feel a sense of time here...and the passing of it. This is quite beautiful, and the flow of it is nice.
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8th Oct 2018 10:23pm
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8th Oct 2018 10:01pm
Like the others above, I admire the flow. That and your sublime take on romance. Fine work!
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