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Words for grandpa
I touched your hands and they were cold.
I cried a tear and down it rolled.
Sometimes I still feel the urge to cry.
When I think about the years that went by.
Growning up was hard.
Knowing life had stopped your heart.
You went away out of the blue.
We will always miss you.
Like an arrow that never reaches it's target.
But deep down, I know we never parted.
I always admired the positivity you had in you.
Even when it was pain life put you through.
To think of your smile again,
Made me move my pen.
I cried a tear and down it rolled.
Sometimes I still feel the urge to cry.
When I think about the years that went by.
Growning up was hard.
Knowing life had stopped your heart.
You went away out of the blue.
We will always miss you.
Like an arrow that never reaches it's target.
But deep down, I know we never parted.
I always admired the positivity you had in you.
Even when it was pain life put you through.
To think of your smile again,
Made me move my pen.
Published 4th Oct 2018
Author's Note
When I was eleven years old I was away on summer camp and when I came home,
my parents had to tell me that my grandfather (whom I got a lot of my interests and musical taste) passed away while I was gone. It broke my heart and I still can't really think about it without halfly crying so I dedicated my first poem ever to him.
my parents had to tell me that my grandfather (whom I got a lot of my interests and musical taste) passed away while I was gone. It broke my heart and I still can't really think about it without halfly crying so I dedicated my first poem ever to him.
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4th Oct 2018 6:57pm
This is a wonderfully heartfelt tribute to your grandpa. Enjoyed it very much as it also brought memories of my grandma.
Well done and welcome to DU!
Well done and welcome to DU!
4th Oct 2018 7:05pm
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4th Oct 2018 11:14pm
It's very nice avp, touching. I wrote something similar. You wanted some advice. I can offer you my personal thoughts on the way I would have laid it out, not too much different, just tightening the narrative. See what you think, it's by no means perfect but I wanted to give you an idea of the rhythmic possibilities here:
I touched your hands and they were cold,
I cried a tear and down it rolled.
Sometimes I still feel the urge to cry,
When I think of the years that went by.
Growing up was really hard,
Knowing life had stopped your heart.
You went away out of the blue,
We will always miss you.
Like an arrow that never reaches its target,
I know deep down we never parted.
I always admired the positivity in you,
Knowing the pain life put you through.
To think of your smile once again,
Made me move my creative pen.
I touched your hands and they were cold,
I cried a tear and down it rolled.
Sometimes I still feel the urge to cry,
When I think of the years that went by.
Growing up was really hard,
Knowing life had stopped your heart.
You went away out of the blue,
We will always miss you.
Like an arrow that never reaches its target,
I know deep down we never parted.
I always admired the positivity in you,
Knowing the pain life put you through.
To think of your smile once again,
Made me move my creative pen.
5th Oct 2018 6:22am
