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Vertigo
Feels like endless suffering
Hear limbless seraphim sing
Melodies mournful, longing
Since they fell and lost their wings
A tragic slip
Like a magic trick
Got them banished there
Punished, plunged through air
I've got vertigo
Dreaming of the things I'll never know
Staring down upon the wastes
From my solitary space
Where I voluntarily stay
I wish the past could be erased
Watch them again ascend to grace
Alas
The kingdom does not want them back
Trapped
Reliving sins they can't retract
Fatal flight
On that fateful night
Faces filled with fright
In the failing light
Such a painful sight
Hunched and soulless silhouettes
Tortured thoughtless marionettes
Turned to faceless puppets
For their irreverence
Plummet from the summit
This is heaven's severance
Hear limbless seraphim sing
Melodies mournful, longing
Since they fell and lost their wings
A tragic slip
Like a magic trick
Got them banished there
Punished, plunged through air
I've got vertigo
Dreaming of the things I'll never know
Staring down upon the wastes
From my solitary space
Where I voluntarily stay
I wish the past could be erased
Watch them again ascend to grace
Alas
The kingdom does not want them back
Trapped
Reliving sins they can't retract
Fatal flight
On that fateful night
Faces filled with fright
In the failing light
Such a painful sight
Hunched and soulless silhouettes
Tortured thoughtless marionettes
Turned to faceless puppets
For their irreverence
Plummet from the summit
This is heaven's severance
Published 3rd Oct 2018
| Edited 12th Oct 2018
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14th Oct 2018 2:00pm
Really like the flow with this ... nice sprinkling of rhyme as well ... bravo my poet ...
14th Oct 2018 10:56pm
Ha, it was like a literal "sprinkling" because I added in some lines that weren't there previously, thank you for the comment!
1st Jan 2019 11:33pm
Everything that I have read by you so far is really great! You can definitely tell that you were influenced by metal music in your poetry. I like that you have Corey Taylor as one of your influences. I was also influenced by metal music in my poetry, and artists such as Trevor Strnad, from the The Black Dahlia Murder. Anyway, nice poem!
Thanks! Corey Taylor has absolutely been a huge influence on my writing since I began. I think bands I used to listen to a lot, like Mudvayne and Korn, also left a lasting impression. I'm also a huge fan of Nevermore, Metallica, Blind Guardian, Tyr, and a variety of other metal bands. Recently I have also been listening to some In This Moment, and a lot of Eminem. Since I began listening to Eminem often while I was at work, I feel like my lyrical skills have improved greatly.
