My Mistress

Nice structure with this one ... it helps the flow ... the cadence ... good luck!!!

Thank you so much, dear poet!

Great to get feedback on the flow... I struggled a bit to get it right with this one...

Felt this part...
"wanna break free
but she won’t let go
Why would she?
for she is me"

If you felt it I have done something right!

Thanks heaps for the comment and the reading list... honored!

this is pure skill
how you conquered and
delivered
with effect
the
cruel and the cruelty
of obsession
and obsessive disorders
like bullimia nervosa
and anorexia
and other mental health conditions

this IS to me
poetry

"this IS to me
poetry" > that is such an amazing compliment!

I find competitions to be very inspiring, but I'm not obsessed with someone (never been) so this came out... thank you so much for your comment, my friend, it means a lot!

Dearest Melia,

That I never seize to amaze is an amazing compliment! I already came to the conclusion I go from one topic to the other, I never know what's next myself... I wasn't sure if the category "dark" was the right one, because of your "dark feeling" I will leave it as it is...

Thank you so much for your comment, they are always deeply cherished!

Love and Light, Duende

excellent...great pace...great expression...nice write Duende...leaves one wanting more.

Thank you so much, dear poetrician!

Wanting more is a good sign... means a lot!!!

Self vs self, yes we know this struggle. We are constantly at war, some battles we win, but sadly some we loose. Please continue, nice piece  

The battle with self is indeed the hardest battle... we truly are our own worst enemy...

Thank you so much for your comment I_IS_ME, means a lot!

I’ve struggled with similar issues in the past; this is simple and direct, cutting as intended

Thank you so much for your comment and your openness, Taurus!

It's indeed simple and direct... during the process of writing I added a few lines which I later removed, because it interrupted the flow. I hate deleting lines I have written, but sometimes less is more, especially when you want it to be cutting ;-)

To quote Stephen King:

“Kill your darlings,
Kill your darlings,
Kill your darlings.”

So many lines and ideas that sounded awesome in your head on their own and then you put it to paper and it doesn’t work as well in context as you thought it would. Hurts to do, but the ultimate quality of the piece makes you happier without it in that case.

True that! The first cuts didn't hurt... my writing process often starts with brainstorming (read: a file filled with thoughts... chaos) At the end I added one line, went back and forth before I took it out...

btw: I have a poem on the go with the title: Kill...

Very simple direct and with subtle punches .. excellent ink ... my niece has struggled with this ... it is a difficult path ...

It's a difficult path indeed...

Thank you so much for your comment, great to hear you thought this was excellent!

In Liverpudlian (dialect of people from Liverpool) this poem would be described as a "corker" (very high compliment) - and it certainly is ... guttural, word-sounds on topic, short lines reflecting miniscule meals, tension, a photo to make one sit up and pay attention and overall provoking a visceral reaction - and all oozing the topic of obsession. Great stuff Duende, really impressive.

First off... I was wondering if this poem would meet the criteria for the competition, glad to hear it oozes obsession. I can imagine the lines reflecting miniscule meals and I already told myself "now everyone will think I have anorexia" which I don't. I am diagnosed with EDNOS (a mixture of both)

The roots however are the same: control.

As for that picture... I like to provoke and evoke and the other pictures I have are already attached to other poems... the first one is more explicit (if you like I can provide links or you can follow the #)

Thank you so much for your comment and calling this a corker, Josh!

I felt this holds truth.Addiction is a life changer.
Good luck in the comp Duende, you are on 🔥these day.
Zazzles xxx

Thank you so much, Zazzles

Inspiration is coming back and addiction is a bitch!

xXx Duende

Duende, this is a powerful testament to what I believe to be anorexia. Though it could also apply to other forms if eating disorders.  

The photo is haunting and very disconcerting because we are what we eat.  It's a shattering obsession on either side of the spectrum.

Powerful testament is a beautiful compliment, Ahavati

I know this looks like anorexia, but in my case it's another form (EDNOS) I took the more explicit parts out, because the roots are the same and it's already in previous work...

it's indeed a shattering disease... it was dormant for 10 years, but got triggered by a series of traumatic events... I beat it once, I'll beat it again!

Thank you so much for your comment... means a lot!

As powerful as that pic. Is, ur words were double that n I’m trying not to imagine that kinda pain for you, so I really hope it’s just make believe for the comp.

It's no make believe, dear... it's my reality again...

I'm a figther, I'll beat it! Thank heaps for your comment and support!

It's strange there are certain things we know we should separate ourselves from but just can't seem to manage to do. I can feel the connection D

It's not so strange when you realize it started as coping. It once had a function...

Still... it's a fight! Thank heaps for your comment, Tim

I agree 100% with cold_fusion above! This is incredible writing. You are a potent poet and your skill at expression is formidable. You don't have to have experience with any particular obsession to feel the pull of it in this poem. You don't even need the picture to see imagery vividly, but it's a perfect compliment to an already powerful poem. Sending endless hugs, my sweet little sister. I love you

...ever your Willow

And here I was thinking it was a mediocre poem... it's hard to see our own work objectively, it's only through other people's eyes that it comes alive...

Your compliments make me blush, my sweet sister! I'm so happy poetry came back and for it to be so well received is the cherry on the cake (lol)

Thank you so much... I love you!

The delivery of this piece is amazing, raw, blunt and straight to the point. The words chosen are great it's one of those that many people will relate to through different addictions and disorders. Well done, much appreciated that you wrote this.

Thank you so much for your extensive comment, that means a lot!

It was a bit difficult to post, so I'm quite honored with such high praise :-)