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Postmortem
https://youtu.be/AVYYpNaSs2Y
Was listening to this and out came this
Please listen while reading, Thanks.
Pixies & fireflies hide in plain view
beneath a midnight sky tucked
underneath a Harvest moon
Yellow and orange painted leaves
dispatch and wave goodbye
with no sound to be heard
when passing by.
Raindrops fall and shift gears
washing death away another day
soon another year
loves dying kiss hitched a ride
aboard an autumn breeze,
Moonlight Sonata serenades
familiar uncertainties,
silencing the beast in me...
Was listening to this and out came this
Please listen while reading, Thanks.
Pixies & fireflies hide in plain view
beneath a midnight sky tucked
underneath a Harvest moon
Yellow and orange painted leaves
dispatch and wave goodbye
with no sound to be heard
when passing by.
Raindrops fall and shift gears
washing death away another day
soon another year
loves dying kiss hitched a ride
aboard an autumn breeze,
Moonlight Sonata serenades
familiar uncertainties,
silencing the beast in me...
Author's Note
Just enjoying Autumns arrival ....
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Re. Postmordem
24th Sep 2018 3:01pm
Autumn is my favorite season and this made me feel the autumn... the pixies & fireflies, the Moonlight Sonata and then the Harvest Moon... such a beautiful poem, Zazzles and a great song <3
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Re: Re. Postmordem
24th Sep 2018 3:11pm
Hello Duende
Yes me too there is just something about the smell the look and feel after a brutal summer heat..
It’s a pleasure to see you on my page dear lady..
Thanks for the Rl
Hope you’re well
Love
Jackie xx
Yes me too there is just something about the smell the look and feel after a brutal summer heat..
It’s a pleasure to see you on my page dear lady..
Thanks for the Rl
Hope you’re well
Love
Jackie xx
Re. Postmordem
24th Sep 2018 3:26pm
The fall is about to descend soon here with the beautiful colors and crispness in the air. You brought a delightful feel.
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Re: Re. Postmordem
24th Sep 2018 3:54pm
Hello Tim , yes Autumn just does things to my soul... hope you’re well :)
Hugsss
Jackie xo
Hugsss
Jackie xo
Re. Postmordem
Mornin' Zazzy... nice poetic wake-up call, this little ditty. Makes one feel like a kid again... fixin' to run and jump in the leaf pile...
Nicely put together too... though you do...
have a typo or two...
that sort of stick out
where they shouldn't oughter...
I refer to S3, L2... 'an' needs a "D (dispatch *and* wave)
and then S5, L5... a few too many letters in 'silencecing'... a small reduction makes it right... *silencing* the beast... a slip of the finger, no doubt... you just missed it on your way out. hugs, Ely
PS Love your title... just a little twisted... giggle. E
Nicely put together too... though you do...
have a typo or two...
that sort of stick out
where they shouldn't oughter...
I refer to S3, L2... 'an' needs a "D (dispatch *and* wave)
and then S5, L5... a few too many letters in 'silencecing'... a small reduction makes it right... *silencing* the beast... a slip of the finger, no doubt... you just missed it on your way out. hugs, Ely
PS Love your title... just a little twisted... giggle. E
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Re: Re. Postmordem
24th Sep 2018 3:53pm
Eeek! Oh yes thank you for the edit check Ely!
I appreciate that :) I am so happy to read you felt this write, I’m still feeling the vibe :)
Hugs and a pinch!
Your friend
Jackie XXXX
I appreciate that :) I am so happy to read you felt this write, I’m still feeling the vibe :)
Hugs and a pinch!
Your friend
Jackie XXXX
Re: Re. Postmordem
24th Sep 2018 3:55pm
I corrected the typos Ely, I think I’ve got it!
lol have a wonderful day!
Jackie xx
lol have a wonderful day!
Jackie xx
Re: Re. Postmordem
24th Sep 2018 5:41pm
Re. Postmordem
24th Sep 2018 6:09pm
Lovely work, Jackie. I can almost feel the autumn breeze. One detail: the title should be spelled "postmortem." Other than that it's a beauty.
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Re: Re. Postmordem
24th Sep 2018 6:17pm
Didn’t see that! Excellent catch, thanks :)
Glad you felt sumfin’Crow
Loves you
❤️Jackie xoxox
Glad you felt sumfin’Crow
Loves you
❤️Jackie xoxox
Re. Postmortem
26th Sep 2018 1:45am
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15th Oct 2018 00:28am
Re. Postmortem
30th Sep 2018 2:51am
Beautiful tribute to the season Jackie. Syllabic harmony and the message is organic. Enjoyed this natural reverie.
Daniel
Daniel
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Re: Re. Postmortem
15th Oct 2018 00:29am
Hey Daniel so nice to see you here :)
Yes Autumn is my favorite season...
Hugsss
Jackie xxx
Yes Autumn is my favorite season...
Hugsss
Jackie xxx