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Salt of Life
still remember
the day i arrived
silenced bird with
disfigured wings
insecure about
everything but
willing to evolve
you came my way
spoke of sound
enjambment
onomatopoeia
rhythm and flow
showed me how
to cut & prune
paved the way
to better writes
but the thing that
inspires me most is
your brutal honesty
and steadfastness
to not withhold
thanks Todski
because of you
and your support
i’ve found my voice
and sing my own song
the day i arrived
silenced bird with
disfigured wings
insecure about
everything but
willing to evolve
you came my way
spoke of sound
enjambment
onomatopoeia
rhythm and flow
showed me how
to cut & prune
paved the way
to better writes
but the thing that
inspires me most is
your brutal honesty
and steadfastness
to not withhold
thanks Todski
because of you
and your support
i’ve found my voice
and sing my own song
Written by
Duende
Published 15th Sep 2018
| Edited 3rd Dec 2024
Author's Note
A Little Tribute For Todski.
https://youtu.be/voNEgCKzves
https://youtu.be/voNEgCKzves
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Re. Salt of Life
15th Sep 2018 12:29pm
Re: Re. Salt of Life
15th Sep 2018 1:19pm
Great to hear you think it's heartwarming :-)
(it's a competition entry and was a bit of a challenge to write)
(it's a competition entry and was a bit of a challenge to write)
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15th Sep 2018 1:19pm
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16th Sep 2018 3:34am
Re. Salt of Life
15th Sep 2018 2:14pm
"and sing my own song"
... and the more you sing it, the more powerful it becomes. Nice write.
... and the more you sing it, the more powerful it becomes. Nice write.
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16th Sep 2018 3:05am
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
16th Sep 2018 3:17am
Indeed... not a lot of writers are like that, I'm grateful I met one!
Happy you liked the enjambment... when I started reading here it didn't make sense to me at all. Now I can't write without it (you should read some of my first work, it's a difference like night and day)
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment!
Happy you liked the enjambment... when I started reading here it didn't make sense to me at all. Now I can't write without it (you should read some of my first work, it's a difference like night and day)
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment!
Re. Salt of Life
15th Sep 2018 7:15pm
A moving tribute, Duende. That's the best kind of support when you can finally cut loose and sing your own song. You write yours beautifully.
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16th Sep 2018 3:35am
Re. Salt of Life
15th Sep 2018 7:42pm
So beautifully written, my doll!
lovely dedication to an unique entity...
lovely dedication to an unique entity...
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
16th Sep 2018 3:40am
So happy to hear you love this one, my dear!
Thank you so much for your comment and the reading list add, am truly flattered <3
Thank you so much for your comment and the reading list add, am truly flattered <3
Re. Salt of Life
Anonymous
15th Sep 2018 9:56pm
Sing your song baby !!!
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
16th Sep 2018 4:23am
Writing a tribute is (was) quite challenging, so I'm glad it came as a surprise and made you smile! It's well deserved... don't underestimate yourself!
It maybe true that I already had a voice, but it was a voice I didn't like and even though you think teaching me a few things was not a great deal, it meant a lot to me! I changed my style (almost) overnight and I couldn't have done that without you!
Thank you for your comment and the reading list add, I really appreciate it!
It maybe true that I already had a voice, but it was a voice I didn't like and even though you think teaching me a few things was not a great deal, it meant a lot to me! I changed my style (almost) overnight and I couldn't have done that without you!
Thank you for your comment and the reading list add, I really appreciate it!
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
16th Sep 2018 12:17pm
You made me laugh out loud! Just a bonus, lol
I'm very much aware of your ego and I'm glad you are too, but I happen to like big ego's... and opiniated so and so's... deep down they're often very cute ;-)
I'm very much aware of your ego and I'm glad you are too, but I happen to like big ego's... and opiniated so and so's... deep down they're often very cute ;-)
Re. Salt of Life
16th Sep 2018 00:21am
What a delicate and inspiring tribute, it seems you’ve truly blossomed! It’s so important to find others you can vibe with and share mutual support with. I’m glad you’re here.
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
16th Sep 2018 4:32am
Your "I'm glad you're here" made me smile.
Thank you for your heartwarming words, I think it's indeed the beauty of this place... the connections you build and the support given and received.
Thank you for your heartwarming words, I think it's indeed the beauty of this place... the connections you build and the support given and received.
Re. Salt of Life
16th Sep 2018 1:19pm
Re: Re. Salt of Life
16th Sep 2018 5:16pm
In all honesty... they are far from healed, but I believe that no matter how dark life is, it's important to not forget the positives! Thank you for your comment :-)
Re: Re. Salt of Life
16th Sep 2018 5:47pm
perhaps healing is not binary...and happens over time...but in the meantime...how's this for positive: darkness can be great fuel if you let it :)
i do wish you well and to be on the other-side of where-ever you wish not to be!
i do wish you well and to be on the other-side of where-ever you wish not to be!
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
17th Sep 2018 2:14pm
Healing is definitely not binary...
Such beautiful well wishes... thank you so much <3
Such beautiful well wishes... thank you so much <3
Re. Salt of Life
16th Sep 2018 5:37pm
Tributes are a thorn in my poetic hand.
You did a lovely write her Duende :)
Glad to see you writing again 👍
Zazzles
You did a lovely write her Duende :)
Glad to see you writing again 👍
Zazzles
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
17th Sep 2018 2:17pm
Hey Zazzles, happy to see you on my page!
Thank you so much for your comment, you made my day :-)
Thank you so much for your comment, you made my day :-)
Re. Salt of Life
17th Sep 2018 2:01am
now this is great i'd love to read more selfless poems like this
I for one have written a piece where I thank all the people who groomed me and inspired me.
i'd like to see people(poets) help more upcoming and young writers
such an awesome write
guess i'm now a fan
I for one have written a piece where I thank all the people who groomed me and inspired me.
i'd like to see people(poets) help more upcoming and young writers
such an awesome write
guess i'm now a fan
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
17th Sep 2018 2:22pm
Thank you so much for your enthusiastic comment!
Will look for that poem... tributes and selfless poetry are necessary, especially since there's a lot of darkness here (my page included)
Great to hear you think this is awesome.... flattered you're a fan :-)
Will look for that poem... tributes and selfless poetry are necessary, especially since there's a lot of darkness here (my page included)
Great to hear you think this is awesome.... flattered you're a fan :-)
Re. Salt of Life
17th Sep 2018 10:58am
Having given many others tributes of my own
I realize it’s importance... this was a great one
n I’m sure he was feeling deeply honored.
I realize it’s importance... this was a great one
n I’m sure he was feeling deeply honored.
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
17th Sep 2018 2:24pm
Your tributes are always a pleasure to read and I'm happy you enjoyed mine... thank you so much for your comment & support, dear!
Re. Salt of Life
Anonymous
17th Sep 2018 4:33pm
And your voice is a very beautiful thing, my sweet sister. I'm so happy to see you back on the pages of the Underground. I love you :-)
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
18th Sep 2018 6:05am
That's such an amazing thing to say, love!
Thank you so much for your comment and the warm welcome ❤
With love, Duende
Thank you so much for your comment and the warm welcome ❤
With love, Duende
Re. Salt of Life
17th Sep 2018 5:48pm
Excellent offering, Duende. Very befitting tribute to one who took the time to care. Not many take the time to express their gratitude, much less encase it in poetry.
Poetry is forever, no matter what. 📝❤
Poetry is forever, no matter what. 📝❤
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
18th Sep 2018 6:03am
Thank you so much for your comment, Ahavati
He did take the time and because of a competition I finally found the inspiration to express my gratitude, aside from the fact that he and his work are very inspiring!
Honered by the reading list add ❤
He did take the time and because of a competition I finally found the inspiration to express my gratitude, aside from the fact that he and his work are very inspiring!
Honered by the reading list add ❤
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
22nd Sep 2018 10:39am
Re. Salt of Life
22nd Sep 2018 9:10pm
The tribute itself is sweet (and from what I’ve read, deserved), but this is also just a well written and cleverly plotted piece.
Though given your work to this point, I can’t say I’m surprised
Though given your work to this point, I can’t say I’m surprised
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
23rd Sep 2018 9:08am
Sweet and cleverly plotted... I can live with that ;-)
Thank you for your amazing comment and for bringing me smiles this morning!
Thank you for your amazing comment and for bringing me smiles this morning!
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Re: Re. Salt of Life
14th Mar 2024 6:34am
Yes, he truly did - was a great inspiration to many.
Unfortunately he left this place - based on your words I can only hope he was still here when you joined the deep. I will keep singing my song, I can only be me, unapologetically me.
Thanks heaps for commenting, Ethan, I appreciate you!
Unfortunately he left this place - based on your words I can only hope he was still here when you joined the deep. I will keep singing my song, I can only be me, unapologetically me.
Thanks heaps for commenting, Ethan, I appreciate you!
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