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chance
there is a time for escape
in the hoping i intake
in the breath, i awake
in a moment , never late
in each second, i await
a step on thoughtful plake
a jump to my fate
my hand i take
but i love
to wait
in the hoping i intake
in the breath, i awake
in a moment , never late
in each second, i await
a step on thoughtful plake
a jump to my fate
my hand i take
but i love
to wait
Published 28th Aug 2018
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28th Aug 2018 00:37am
Take that chance! A leap of faith, let me know how/if it works out! Nice rhyme.
28th Aug 2018 2:26am
I love to wait for a better chance...and love this short and cute one. A brisk pace in this poem and it made me want to dance....
love
Jasmine
love
Jasmine
28th Aug 2018 5:08pm
A very melodic sound to this, favorite line,
" in the hoping i intake "
Hope is never ending!
" in the hoping i intake "
Hope is never ending!
5th Nov 2018 2:11am
Good write and structure/layout to this piece.
i see two sides to this poem;1st a daring girl ready to tackle the world like a hurricane shaken magic 8-ball, and second a person standing at the checkout counter scratching off jumbo bucks tickets and throwing the losers in the floor.
excellent, keep'em coming.
i see two sides to this poem;1st a daring girl ready to tackle the world like a hurricane shaken magic 8-ball, and second a person standing at the checkout counter scratching off jumbo bucks tickets and throwing the losers in the floor.
excellent, keep'em coming.
