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Impatience (quattraine)
I woke today to find - impatiently,
He'd clipped a leash to the black band he keeps
Around my neck (because I'm property,
He has acquired) that each day he seeks;
I wonder if it was the tug that woke
Me up, or was it just my well-slapped mound;
But, that is unimportant: round the rooms
We go - he thinks a promenade is sound;
It means he builds up appetites and thanks
Me for all my exertions on all fours,
By having me kneel up to take the spanks.
He'll deal out to my bottom without pause;
Eventually contented with the shades
Of red he has achieved, he wipes my eyes;
And has me open wide, so he'll put paid
To rumours that impatience isn't wise.
He'd clipped a leash to the black band he keeps
Around my neck (because I'm property,
He has acquired) that each day he seeks;
I wonder if it was the tug that woke
Me up, or was it just my well-slapped mound;
But, that is unimportant: round the rooms
We go - he thinks a promenade is sound;
It means he builds up appetites and thanks
Me for all my exertions on all fours,
By having me kneel up to take the spanks.
He'll deal out to my bottom without pause;
Eventually contented with the shades
Of red he has achieved, he wipes my eyes;
And has me open wide, so he'll put paid
To rumours that impatience isn't wise.
Published 22nd Aug 2018
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22nd Aug 2018 10:18pm
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25th Aug 2018 12:57pm
I love the images this conjures up and the quatrain format seems to give it an added delicacy. Most of the rhymes work really well.
I wonder if the rhythm might benefit from the removal of the odd word. For example 'I wonder if it was the tug that woke/
Me up, or was it just my well-slapped mound;' might sound better as 'I wonder if it was the tug that woke/ or was it just my well-slapped mound;' and it doesn't loose any of the meaning.
A great read
I wonder if the rhythm might benefit from the removal of the odd word. For example 'I wonder if it was the tug that woke/
Me up, or was it just my well-slapped mound;' might sound better as 'I wonder if it was the tug that woke/ or was it just my well-slapped mound;' and it doesn't loose any of the meaning.
A great read
