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R.M
Heads a storm
got to clean up this dorm
Thunderstorm.
thoughts strike in uniform
I’m not the norm
too wet to keep you warm
Cannot conform.
tolerance is lukewarm
let me reform
reorganise & transform
brainstorm? no
Worded
Hailstorm.
got to clean up this dorm
Thunderstorm.
thoughts strike in uniform
I’m not the norm
too wet to keep you warm
Cannot conform.
tolerance is lukewarm
let me reform
reorganise & transform
brainstorm? no
Worded
Hailstorm.
Published 10th Aug 2018
| Edited 11th Jan 2019
Author's Note
Just trying something different
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12th Aug 2018 12:29pm
"Thunderstorm, thoughts strike in uniform"
I really like this line, nice write.
I really like this line, nice write.
13th Aug 2018 12:54pm
This is cool. I also like 'thoughts strike (double meaning there) in uniform. It's neither right or wrong but was wondering what you thought of this line at the end instead, as a more general statement:
This platform, using poetry as an art form.
This platform, using poetry as an art form.
13th Aug 2018 2:52pm
11th Jan 2019 12:33pm
you're going ...
in the right direction Alice!
keep writing...
love how you kept it flowing ...
in the right direction Alice!
keep writing...
love how you kept it flowing ...
