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#Past.1
Why does this hurt, I was the one that ended
I feel like dirt, had a thought that you pretended
But I guess it’s true, on holiday you go
With your new boo, up in my face you show
You just need a reaction, but I refuse to give in
No satisfaction, breaking down would be a sin
But I hope she’s happy with you, cos you know I wasn’t
I’m glad we’re through, your love was rotten
I feel like dirt, had a thought that you pretended
But I guess it’s true, on holiday you go
With your new boo, up in my face you show
You just need a reaction, but I refuse to give in
No satisfaction, breaking down would be a sin
But I hope she’s happy with you, cos you know I wasn’t
I’m glad we’re through, your love was rotten
Published 10th Aug 2018
| Edited 9th Jan 2019
Author's Note
This is actually my first ever completed poem. This came from a relationship I ended because I just wasn't happy and constantly depressed. He was devastated, that's what he led me to believe - he had a new girlfriend and went on holiday 3 weeks later. What a smack in the face!
However - that journey has led me to having this platform and I couldn't be more grateful :)
However - that journey has led me to having this platform and I couldn't be more grateful :)
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13th Aug 2018 12:49pm
You probably hurt because you had great expectations with your new love but if it isn't working out & you can't solve your differences, it's always better to move on. Yes, it's painful at first but it's what you gain in the long run that counts. :-)
I like your use of bold lettering at certain points in this write also.
I like your use of bold lettering at certain points in this write also.
13th Aug 2018 2:50pm
You've hit the nail on the head with that analysis and you're right, I've gain lessons from this pain :)
Thank you for your feedback, really appreciate that
Thank you for your feedback, really appreciate that
