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uninvited
If someone were to ask me
What I think heaven could be like
I’d tell them
It’s wherever
And
Whenever
I am with you
But
They never ask with the intention
Of knowing my interpretation
...
They tell me
Through upturned noses
What they
“Know”
It to be
And
What it isn’t
And
Who’s not invited
What I think heaven could be like
I’d tell them
It’s wherever
And
Whenever
I am with you
But
They never ask with the intention
Of knowing my interpretation
...
They tell me
Through upturned noses
What they
“Know”
It to be
And
What it isn’t
And
Who’s not invited
Published 3rd Aug 2018
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3rd Aug 2018 4:03am
It's direct alright. But, not much else.
Your message is clear; however, there isn't much in terms of devices or imagery. I can take a peek inside the generalization of a group of people who outcasts others based on bias, more than likely in relation to religion.
It's certainly a good start to something that just needs to be fleshed out more.
Your message is clear; however, there isn't much in terms of devices or imagery. I can take a peek inside the generalization of a group of people who outcasts others based on bias, more than likely in relation to religion.
It's certainly a good start to something that just needs to be fleshed out more.
Anonymous
3rd Aug 2018 4:50am
And I say "they" are fools. And I have no interest in their brand of heaven. You never seem to need many words to express perfectly.
...Willow
...Willow
