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WHY CAIN?
Sirens wail in the distance
Another deadly night
You started this
You're the reason i can't sleep
Why did you kill abel?
Another deadly night
You started this
You're the reason i can't sleep
Why did you kill abel?
Published 1st Aug 2018
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Fine poem steelerman Do you need 'all' and do you think you could do without 'in the city' This poem ' though short has substance a pleasant change on DUP.Kexby
1st Aug 2018 1:01pm
Thanks Kexby, you are right, I could of dropped the "all" but as far as " in the city" . I guess i put that there because I have two homes and actually live in two different states ( Pennsylvania and Maryland) and I share my writing on Facebook with my friends and wanted them to know the sirens were being heard in Baltimore Maryland which has one of the highest murder rates in the USA. In my home in PA there has never been a murder there in my entire life. I hate living in Baltimore but I am here part time job related. So it was my own personal jab at the city!
30th Jan 2019 6:46pm
Leaves you wondering...
I liked the biblical reference, and the emotion you put into this concise little piece.
You did a good job!
I liked the biblical reference, and the emotion you put into this concise little piece.
You did a good job!
