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sweet cherry
dear cholo,
I'm your girl from round the block
you know the little blue eyed chola who stuck out
do you remember me?
my sweet cherry was yours for the taking
but you only got a finger in
before I started trembling
excited and scared
that a man was actually touching me there
and when your cock touched my inner thighs
what I was about to do became a frightening reality
shaking with protest on my mind
I was so afraid of what we were doing
then your dick touched my sweet pussy lips
when you tried to put it in I was too tight
I said no daddy I can't do it tonight
I felt slick wetness in my pleasure zone
while you kissed my neck and we petted
I didn't know yet what an orgasm was
you would get me so damned close
then pull away from me
you begged me to let you have my innocence
so one night I let you in
you had me straddle you
and ease onto you at my comfort
it hurt so bad I wanted to cry
I couldn't believe I had a cock inside
slowly I eased onto you
until finally you said you were in
I didn't know what to do I sat atop you frozen
you grabbed my hips
and had me bounce up and down
you came so fast
from months of anticipation
when it was over I looked at you
with tears in my eyes
you kissed me
and said baby it will be alright
my cholo from the block
the cherry popping king, a gigolo
I came to find out
gave me his ring then took it back
I loved you but sadly you never loved me
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 9th Jul 2018
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Re. sweet cherry
9th Jul 2018 10:16am
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9th Jul 2018 10:17am
no it's a true story of my first time with a boy from my neighborhood..
thank you for reading..
love Crimsin
thank you for reading..
love Crimsin
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9th Jul 2018 12:06pm
I'm so sorry to hear this was true...people can be so..demeaning...frightening...
It's like a sexual giving and taking away. Some people only know how to take and I feel he never really gave. I pray you find or have found real love and make that first time worth it. Thank you for this write Crim.
I have yet to...have a first time and pray that when I do, they decide to stay. I always worry about being good enough.
Keep your soul alight and brighten the sky in your writes, Brenda.
You are the hardest hitter..second to Taryn, where ever she may be.
No offence, it's a hard decision but Taryn gets to me with her crisp, honest, and stylish pens.
Stay strong,
Tryston.
It's like a sexual giving and taking away. Some people only know how to take and I feel he never really gave. I pray you find or have found real love and make that first time worth it. Thank you for this write Crim.
I have yet to...have a first time and pray that when I do, they decide to stay. I always worry about being good enough.
Keep your soul alight and brighten the sky in your writes, Brenda.
You are the hardest hitter..second to Taryn, where ever she may be.
No offence, it's a hard decision but Taryn gets to me with her crisp, honest, and stylish pens.
Stay strong,
Tryston.
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Re. sweet cherry
I called him daddy as a sexy endearment only..
I hope that makes things clearer..
love Crimsin
I hope that makes things clearer..
love Crimsin
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9th Jul 2018 10:26am
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Anonymous
9th Jul 2018 10:48am
Brenda, you stitch that 'first time' exquisitely to tapestry of anticipation. It should be so special, but rarely raises (pun intended) to occasion. Rob
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9th Jul 2018 10:54am
thank you dearest Rob I just wanted to capture my thoughts as my experience occurred I put myself in the mindset of my fourteen year old self and went from there..
I'm happy it was affective..
love Brenda
I'm happy it was affective..
love Brenda
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Anonymous
9th Jul 2018 2:04pm
I believe that memories come back to haunt us, sometimes in good, sometimes in Bad. Sad thing is that we can't repeat them, as time relentlessly flows. But memories are there and they remind us of something, which often is only an association with the first thought. How many times do we start thinking about one thing and end up thinking of so many others. Poetry is an evocation of thoughts that have impressed themselves into our minds. The Evos is actually born as a poetic thought. But only the gift of words of a true poet can recreate a feeling with the strength of words and attributes. This was a great stroll into your past dear one. Thank you for letting us participate. Love J.
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9th Jul 2018 2:47pm
thank you dearest Juvenalis for the wonderful insights to memory and how it works in regards to poetry.. I believe you're right funny things memories..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. sweet cherry
9th Jul 2018 3:58pm
The depth of pain in love.. I can feel each n every word from you which comes from your deep heart.
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9th Jul 2018 4:01pm
yes sadly I was a young girl in love with an older boy who liked to get around I found out later.. this letter was for me though he died young...
thank you for the love and understanding on this write...
love Crim
thank you for the love and understanding on this write...
love Crim
Re: Re. sweet cherry
9th Jul 2018 4:04pm
I wish you will find your real n true love which will make your heart rejoice
Good luck
Good luck
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9th Jul 2018 4:07pm
Re. sweet cherry
9th Jul 2018 6:54pm
It's a shame we cannot all have pleasant memories of our first times. Thank you for sharing your experience.
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9th Jul 2018 8:25pm
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10th Jul 2018 00:25am
Echo Poemlover. That was too young, I feel. I sense the pain.
The accompanying picture conveys the vulnerability of the moment. (Reminds me of the painting 'Puberty' by Edvard Munch.)
The accompanying picture conveys the vulnerability of the moment. (Reminds me of the painting 'Puberty' by Edvard Munch.)
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Re: Re. sweet cherry
10th Jul 2018 1:08am
thank you dearest Solomon for feeling the emotion behind this write...
love Crim
love Crim
Re. sweet cherry
11th Jul 2018 10:14pm
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11th Jul 2018 10:19pm
thank you dearest Lawrence i'm still learning how to do this it will get better :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Re: Re. sweet cherry
12th Jul 2018 00:38am
aw thank you graciously dearest John i'm so happy to know it's felt...
yes I have peace in myself I loved him and he did me in his own way...
love Crim
yes I have peace in myself I loved him and he did me in his own way...
love Crim
Re. sweet cherry
12th Jul 2018 2:02am
Some Memories are deep rooted.hoping they don’t haunt you.Poetically we can express ourselves in a way to convey a messsge and that someone can relate and have healing too. Thank you for sharing a part of your life with us.
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12th Jul 2018 2:19am
thank you dearest Shakesperan for sharing this bittersweet memory with me...
love Crim
love Crim
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Anonymous
12th Jul 2018 2:55am
Brenda.. love your honesty.. i didn't lose my cherry till i was 27.. an older lady, 4 years my senior.. i really loved her.. she was so fucked on chemical influence.. i didn't even know.. i was into alcohol, but she went deeper than that.. she needed love, i guess i gave her that.. but once it was over, i was a bastard.. much love..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. sweet cherry
12th Jul 2018 2:59am
dearest Dave thank you for sharing your own personal experience with me... you gave her something very special of yourself and I know you were a beautiful love sometimes that's enough... me I was a little fourteen year old romantic in love with a twenty something year old gigolo... I know he loved me in the moment...
love you..
Brenda
love you..
Brenda
Re. sweet cherry
14th Jul 2018 8:00pm
It feels like the first time!(Foreigner) You made it feel exactly like what you wanted to convey!
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16th Jul 2018 1:45am