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I am...
I am the quiet, I am the storm
I am the rose, I am the thorn
I am the judgment and yet the compassion
I am the student who teaches the lesson
I am the silence, I am the noise
I am the decision without the choice
I am the black, I am the white
An angel by day and a vampire at night
I am contradiction and in between
I am the change that is yet to be seen
I am the one who longs to be free
I am and I am and more I will be
I am....
I am the rose, I am the thorn
I am the judgment and yet the compassion
I am the student who teaches the lesson
I am the silence, I am the noise
I am the decision without the choice
I am the black, I am the white
An angel by day and a vampire at night
I am contradiction and in between
I am the change that is yet to be seen
I am the one who longs to be free
I am and I am and more I will be
I am....
Published 2nd Jul 2018
Author's Note
Sorry for the glitch... I had to remove and repost this because I decided to withdraw from the competition. So if you want to comment again, here it is....
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2nd Jul 2018 00:37am
dearest Angel excellent write..
"I am the quiet, I am the storm"
powerful..
love Crim
"I am the quiet, I am the storm"
powerful..
love Crim
2nd Jul 2018 00:49am
4th Jul 2018 11:37am
Wow you are something, I enjoyed the poetic paradoxes, could relate to atleast some. Great meter rhythm in this . Kudos.
Hi I'm quite a newbie here, but have been writting and interacting for ages. Pleez do write your thoughts/comments under my newest poem titled, "play it on your lips", I like meeting poem pals and poems.
Hi I'm quite a newbie here, but have been writting and interacting for ages. Pleez do write your thoughts/comments under my newest poem titled, "play it on your lips", I like meeting poem pals and poems.
5th Jul 2018 3:10am
5th Jul 2018 2:40am
16th Jul 2018 2:28am
I absolutely love this poem. This really relates to someone who is both a strong extrovert and struggling a lot with depression. I feel like this poem is very genuine.
I have a few questions about the line "I am contradiction and in between" I feel like this like is not quite as clear as the other. In all the other lines I can feel a strong 'ying yang' and i feel like in this line it is lacking the yang to the contradiction.
Also I love the poem and thank you for sharing and I am a very new writer so please disregard anything you want!
I have a few questions about the line "I am contradiction and in between" I feel like this like is not quite as clear as the other. In all the other lines I can feel a strong 'ying yang' and i feel like in this line it is lacking the yang to the contradiction.
Also I love the poem and thank you for sharing and I am a very new writer so please disregard anything you want!
16th Jul 2018 3:29am
Hi Eliz
Thanks for your appreciation and for your question.
You are right, in the last verse I break with the pattern of using opposites.
The whole last verse a bit of a synthesis.
It's also about the grey shades and all other possibilities and potentials that could be, will be, or are in the process of becoming. We are not just black and white even though we at times struggle with opposing forces...there are all the other colors and then some. The point was to not just keep going in opposing statemens but bring it more to a rounded end and yet leave everything open....an open end as the last contradiction.
Thanks for your appreciation and for your question.
You are right, in the last verse I break with the pattern of using opposites.
The whole last verse a bit of a synthesis.
It's also about the grey shades and all other possibilities and potentials that could be, will be, or are in the process of becoming. We are not just black and white even though we at times struggle with opposing forces...there are all the other colors and then some. The point was to not just keep going in opposing statemens but bring it more to a rounded end and yet leave everything open....an open end as the last contradiction.
