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Can You Guess? (What it is...)
So perfectly round
Soft edges
Smooth to the touch
Her apricot skin
Ripe with anticipation
Blushing cheeks
Color of first-spring roses
Her very plumpness
Draws forth juices
Waiting to explode
Flit....flit...
The tongue teases the flesh
Gliding over....around...
Tasting every inch
Arousal at its peak
Hovering over the edge
Sinking teeth in ever-so-slowly
Almost torturously so
HER juices erupting
Into your anxious mouth
Dripping
waterfalls
of flavor
A deep moan of pleasure
Thundering from within
Savoring
every
last
drop
Of that first bite of summer
Soft edges
Smooth to the touch
Her apricot skin
Ripe with anticipation
Blushing cheeks
Color of first-spring roses
Her very plumpness
Draws forth juices
Waiting to explode
Flit....flit...
The tongue teases the flesh
Gliding over....around...
Tasting every inch
Arousal at its peak
Hovering over the edge
Sinking teeth in ever-so-slowly
Almost torturously so
HER juices erupting
Into your anxious mouth
Dripping
waterfalls
of flavor
A deep moan of pleasure
Thundering from within
Savoring
every
last
drop
Of that first bite of summer
Published 22nd Jun 2018
Author's Note
I cannot decide if this should remain as an erotic poem....once you guess what I’m actually thinking of...it may change the poem for you entirely. So it’s kind of on the edge....Feel free to share your answers!
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22nd Jun 2018 9:09am
Color, the reality of this site is if you leave the piece as erotica you'll get many more reads. It is an erotic piece. I do sense that your speaking about a piece of juicy fruit but the sensual metaphor is delicious. The build is captivating. Brava!
22nd Jun 2018 9:18am
Thank you! That’s incredibly helpful! So appreciate you! (And you are correct...but which fruit?) 😋
Color. Fruit a perfect metaphor( juices of the fruit a peach perhaps ) not out of place , appreciating thoughts of the brighter fruit. This poem inspires, leave as it is do not transfer, as has been suggested ,to erotica just to attract readers.That would be cheap Kexby
27th Jun 2018 6:15am
22nd Jun 2018 12:06pm
Oh my sweet poetess ... this is just perfect ... sensual ... it SO belongs in erotica ... made me think of peaches ...
27th Jun 2018 6:17am
So very close...smooth skin though....so cousin to the sweet juicy peach is the tantalizing nectarine. 😊
ColorMeSensual
Your reference to the nectarine is interesting, One having a smooth soft texture the other polished; the contrast between a lady who is waxed, another natural, the taste the same, both succulent. visually quite different.nectarines smaller. Kexby
Your reference to the nectarine is interesting, One having a smooth soft texture the other polished; the contrast between a lady who is waxed, another natural, the taste the same, both succulent. visually quite different.nectarines smaller. Kexby
22nd Jun 2018 3:23pm
27th Jun 2018 6:17am
Good guess and very close...the peach has a soft, fuzzy skin....she has a smooth skin...nectarine...
22nd Jun 2018 11:12pm
The fruit is a peach, but the juiciness you describe is sufficiently suggestive.
27th Jun 2018 6:18am
Thank you Solomon....close...it’s a nectarine....but it’s still quite suggestive....
24th Jun 2018 5:38am
27th Jun 2018 6:19am
Thank you so much BC Poet! Strawberries are indeed juicy and delicious...but not smooth skinned....nectarine is this tantalizing fruit...😊
Eating fruit absolutely can be erotic and is often used as a metaphor for sex, so you can leave it as erotic and add tags for anything else you may wish to convey. This is deliciously sensual verse and I enjoyed every sexy bite!
JJ
JJ
3rd Jul 2018 10:21am
Thank you so much! And thanks for the RL addition of my ‘The Only Champion’ poem!
3rd Jul 2018 10:11am
Seems rather erotic to me. Maybe in a different sense of the word 😁.
Great ink 👍
Great ink 👍
3rd Jul 2018 10:23am
Anonymous
12th Jul 2018 8:53pm
Absolutely beautiful as it has me on either side of the fence
16th Mar 2020 9:26pm
