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puff of dust
as the foot lands
skids
and grazes
it is not the smoke
but the puff
of dust
of the scroched red
earth
showering the landing foot
with affection
though Newton
and his laws
may beg
to differ
the puff of dust
the affectionate reaction
to another
now in clay form
though dead
the dust can still fly
so
watchout
for your eye
puff of dust
is
you
is
i
and everything
that is in
your eye
.
Published 18th Jun 2018
Author's Note
Pride: haha the delusion.
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18th Jun 2018 1:25pm
So many things I love about this ... first the structure ... I'm a push over for short crisp poems with masterful line breaks ... the varying of stanza length is captivating ... gives me a getting lost in the poem feel that I adore ... of course the deep message that resonates at the end is just perfect ... not preachy ... ending with a period is ... *sigh* ... the coup de gras
18th Jun 2018 3:03pm
welcome
is the Poet Admired.
Welcome is the
insight deep & sharp.
also welcome
is the review kind and second to none in generosity.
:-)
admirable is the attention to detail beyond words.
well it is but a cold truth ain't it? we, clay then puff of dust.
appreciation
of the visit, the review
beyond words.
is the Poet Admired.
Welcome is the
insight deep & sharp.
also welcome
is the review kind and second to none in generosity.
:-)
admirable is the attention to detail beyond words.
well it is but a cold truth ain't it? we, clay then puff of dust.
appreciation
of the visit, the review
beyond words.
18th Jun 2018 2:18pm
18th Jun 2018 3:06pm
welcome
is the Poet Admired.
welcome
is the review deep
and insightful.
also welcome
is the presence of the friend and the keen eye.
Thank You for noting the note. :-)
two lines from a piece in the works related to 'that' note
he who wears the mask of pride
fear he is trying to hide
apprecation
of the visit, the review
beyond words.
is the Poet Admired.
welcome
is the review deep
and insightful.
also welcome
is the presence of the friend and the keen eye.
Thank You for noting the note. :-)
two lines from a piece in the works related to 'that' note
he who wears the mask of pride
fear he is trying to hide
apprecation
of the visit, the review
beyond words.
18th Jun 2018 4:07pm
This is a beautiful poem. You express something very sacred using simple imagery. I am very impressed. This brought up alot of things in me.
18th Jun 2018 4:27pm
welcome
is the presence of the poet!
welcome
is the kind review and the generosity.
appreciate the keen sight and ins-ght dear friend. honored and humbled at the same time.
glad is but an understatement for the aforementioned.
apprecation.
beyond words.
is the presence of the poet!
welcome
is the kind review and the generosity.
appreciate the keen sight and ins-ght dear friend. honored and humbled at the same time.
glad is but an understatement for the aforementioned.
apprecation.
beyond words.
18th Jun 2018 5:53pm
Wow! I am slowly steadily dragged in this ur poetics..that screens the shimmering puff of dust...lighted golden n filling the spaces within us from within us..the soulful eyes that shower the stardusts...much more this evokes...the dusts of this cosmos tangibly floating in those pencilling rays n the mostly intangibly felt ones..much more in its expanse..but coming bk to ur verses, the way u started totally gripped a reader with the dustful blessings that steers one ..loved the 'rising' .. beautiful as concept n in its deeper reflections...overall ..strong imagery n the meaningfulness you have in extensions, that all but drains unto singularity.
superbly done!
superbly done!
My Oh my!
drowned.
simply totally drowned. by the overwheliming joy and kindness and affection
from an Artist admired universally.
growing up...didn't realise the relation when playing
barefoot
on red scorched parched eart... running, taking a leap and landing back
these puffs of dust
reflecting back on them...
what else to see... the earth we born from
showering her affection on the puff that is now clay and will be back to dust
one day.
a poet, an artist, for some is defined by their depths of observation and insight...but Uma, you but defy everything. This...your review my humble proof/evidence if anyone begs to differ.
appreciation
immense
appreciation
intense
and beyond words.
drowned.
simply totally drowned. by the overwheliming joy and kindness and affection
from an Artist admired universally.
growing up...didn't realise the relation when playing
barefoot
on red scorched parched eart... running, taking a leap and landing back
these puffs of dust
reflecting back on them...
what else to see... the earth we born from
showering her affection on the puff that is now clay and will be back to dust
one day.
a poet, an artist, for some is defined by their depths of observation and insight...but Uma, you but defy everything. This...your review my humble proof/evidence if anyone begs to differ.
appreciation
immense
appreciation
intense
and beyond words.
20th Jun 2018 11:57am
"puff of dust
is
you
is
i
and everything
that is in
your eye".
Love how you have crafted this last stanza,
a very insightful thought.
is
you
is
i
and everything
that is in
your eye".
Love how you have crafted this last stanza,
a very insightful thought.
20th Jun 2018 1:44pm
welcome
is the Poet Admired!!
welcome
is the Friend!!
humbled by your affectionate review dear Friend!!
deep
and immense
the appreciation.
is the Poet Admired!!
welcome
is the Friend!!
humbled by your affectionate review dear Friend!!
deep
and immense
the appreciation.
21st Jun 2018 3:51pm
21st Jun 2018 6:34pm
Welcome
is the Poet Admired!
welcome
is the review genrous and kind.
honored and humbled, dear friend
for your presence
and the kind review!!
appreciation
beyond words!
is the Poet Admired!
welcome
is the review genrous and kind.
honored and humbled, dear friend
for your presence
and the kind review!!
appreciation
beyond words!
