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The Cabinet
The maestro opens up the cabinet wide
His flourish towards the corpse inside
Eyes snapping alive to troubled sight
Freaks gathered beneath the circus light
He wanders several twisted avenues
Black and white, no garish hues
He sees light in one bedsit above
A hint that he, at last, has found his love
She weeps as he shuffles slowly in
Forgives his brutal ways and taste for sin
She serves him the fresh repast
While praying that his stay will last.
His flourish towards the corpse inside
Eyes snapping alive to troubled sight
Freaks gathered beneath the circus light
He wanders several twisted avenues
Black and white, no garish hues
He sees light in one bedsit above
A hint that he, at last, has found his love
She weeps as he shuffles slowly in
Forgives his brutal ways and taste for sin
She serves him the fresh repast
While praying that his stay will last.
Published 7th Jun 2018
Author's Note
Suggested by the 1919 silent horror film "The Cabinet of Dr. Caligari." A bit dated, for sure, but it still gives me the occasional nightmare.
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7th Jun 2018 9:47pm
Always am thrilled when a new poem of yours pops up in my updates ... never disappointed ... great imagery here ...
7th Jun 2018 9:57pm
So glad you're pleased LilDragonFly. I wasn't too sure if this would make much sense to anyone who hasn't seen that old flick. Thank you!
7th Jun 2018 9:58pm
7th Jun 2018 9:58pm
I like this - but in a few places the rhythm jars a little - a couple of well meant suggestions - ignore me at your leisure:
The maestro opens the cabinet wide
He sees dim light in one bedsit above
She weeps profusely as he shuffles in
She serves him with a gaunt yet fresh repast
While praying that his stay will last and last.
Smiles helpfully I hope
Curtseys
The maestro opens the cabinet wide
He sees dim light in one bedsit above
She weeps profusely as he shuffles in
She serves him with a gaunt yet fresh repast
While praying that his stay will last and last.
Smiles helpfully I hope
Curtseys
7th Jun 2018 10:20pm
I'll take another look and might make the changes you suggest. Thanks SweetOblivion!
8th Jun 2018 3:53am
Sir Crow, I've heard this movie referenced but I've never seen it. If it gives nightmares to a seasoned horror film veteran like yourself then I'll have to pass. Thank you for a well penned glimpse of what I'm missing. Bravo!
9th Jun 2018 8:39pm
"The Cabinet of Dr. Caligari" is antiquated by current horror standards, and my nightmares are based on the distorted sets and expressionistic atmosphere, not blood and gore. I doubt that you go for the excesses of recent fright flicks. I recommend it to you Gahdess, and I'll take responsibility for any nightmares.
9th Jun 2018 10:22pm
Alright you convinced me. I get freaked by Victorian death objects like I saw the horse drawn hearse from the 1890's in a museum when I was a teen and it still haunts me. I guess one day I'll have to face the death going head on...or off depending on the circumstances 😀
8th Jun 2018 11:28am
This was a great write! While I have never seen the film I was transported by your words. Definitely a film worth taking the time to watch.
9th Jun 2018 8:41pm
Thank you Bonzi. If you catch the film let me know in a p.m. what you think. We'll compare notes.
10th Jun 2018 3:56am
Whoa Crow......can’t I believe I read this right before bed time.......have mercy.......might sleep with the light on.......LOL! You’re a dynamic writer.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
