[ fAwL ] The Space

nice poem and I liked it. very interesting its called space and you say about watching sleep. sets you on a confused road. maybe the photo is because you no it will never be and you will settle for a photo as you will never have.   I surrender to you as I loved this poem and give you total respect and thank you.

So very lovely. . .and tender. Thank You. 💜

Some of the most beautiful pieces of art I've seen have been of those sleeping.  

One suggestion,  

another to keep  
upon my Wonder Wall  
for keepsake;  

If you replace keep with hang, it would contribute to the assonance of 'a' ( Wall/keepsake ), consonance of 'n' ( another/upon/Wonder ) and a touch of alliteration to 'h' ( holding ).  

I Love You 💜

Of course, your suggestion is brilliant and removes the redundancy as well.

I Love You. 💜

It's most difficult to critique a poem written to you. You're constantly challenging me. 📝💕

And I Love it as much as you. 💜

You are ALWAYS welcome to critique anything I've written. I want to be a better writer. And you're the best writer for the job.  

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