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traversing the void
it's a hollow feeling.
Credits for the poem's editing........ Teri the awesome friend a.k.a Amorous_Tryst
Published 14th Apr 2018
Author's Note
Void....in my opinion the worst of feelings/punishments at least when you're getting flogged/cut/lashed there is some feeling albeit unpleasant.
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14th Apr 2018 4:21pm
Brilliant poem Fusion. Sometimes it's all that's needed; all that needs to be said. Love the white space around the words too. Exquisitely crafted. It's a thinker's poem this one. Where its length lies -
Is in the mind.
Is in the mind.
14th Apr 2018 4:25pm
welcome dear brother!
you got it!!! yes... the space around words...credit for that goes to Amorous_Tryst who suggested this...when first disclosed the draft to her, wrote when was missing my Friends here!!
thank You sincerely
for the visit
the kind appreciation.
you got it!!! yes... the space around words...credit for that goes to Amorous_Tryst who suggested this...when first disclosed the draft to her, wrote when was missing my Friends here!!
thank You sincerely
for the visit
the kind appreciation.
14th Apr 2018 6:35pm
well... in all honesty Teri
I must Thank You! for the help in edit!!
and regarding the words, feelings
it is based on true experience
how it felt
or in other words
how the lack of any feeling felt
it was a horrible experience
the void
in the place of a place in human body
where all feelings/emotions reside and emanate from
prequel to this poem
is an unpublished work
and if at all it'll be published it'll be
heavily redacted.
welcome
is the Friend dear
Welcome
is the review generous!!
appreciation
immense!!
and on a different note, i have come across a poem that beats this ink hands down, a one word poem that had it's affect such profound that i felt my heart squeezed and eyes automatically bleary. Hope my dear Friend she publishes it and soon. And yes, such profundity IS possible, you'll know it when you'll seee it.
I must Thank You! for the help in edit!!
and regarding the words, feelings
it is based on true experience
how it felt
or in other words
how the lack of any feeling felt
it was a horrible experience
the void
in the place of a place in human body
where all feelings/emotions reside and emanate from
prequel to this poem
is an unpublished work
and if at all it'll be published it'll be
heavily redacted.
welcome
is the Friend dear
Welcome
is the review generous!!
appreciation
immense!!
and on a different note, i have come across a poem that beats this ink hands down, a one word poem that had it's affect such profound that i felt my heart squeezed and eyes automatically bleary. Hope my dear Friend she publishes it and soon. And yes, such profundity IS possible, you'll know it when you'll seee it.
14th Apr 2018 11:43pm
this is masterful ..the echoing truth ..n the feeling is inevitably immense..
loved the innovative delivery vehicle you do here!
loved the innovative delivery vehicle you do here!
20th Apr 2018 2:26pm
welcome
is the Artist admired!
Welcome
is the review, kind.
a source of pure joy- a much admired peer
felt the meaning/feeling intended in the ink.
appreciation
held close
held deep.
is the Artist admired!
Welcome
is the review, kind.
a source of pure joy- a much admired peer
felt the meaning/feeling intended in the ink.
appreciation
held close
held deep.
Anonymous
16th Apr 2018 7:15am
this
is
beyond
abstract
cold
&
infused;
your brand of poetry
*like*
20th Apr 2018 2:28pm
welcome
is the Poet admired.
Welcome
is the review affectionate!
cold
well...yes
for one thing that even
the void cannot keep out
the cold
hence my signature
truth...is cold
one thing that's everywhere
unlike the light
cold doesn't need to power/fuel.
it is but
an occasion of joy
a friend saying *like*
appreciation
deep.
intense.
is the Poet admired.
Welcome
is the review affectionate!
cold
well...yes
for one thing that even
the void cannot keep out
the cold
hence my signature
truth...is cold
one thing that's everywhere
unlike the light
cold doesn't need to power/fuel.
it is but
an occasion of joy
a friend saying *like*
appreciation
deep.
intense.
Anonymous
- Edited 30th Jul 2018 7:47am
20th Apr 2018 2:13pm
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20th Apr 2018 2:37pm
welcome
is the Poet admired.
Welcome
is the review, kind.
truly blessed i feel
for the way and how you've conveyed your feeling upon reading this humble ink dear Friend. A source of joy for me today.
In all honesty, I never looked at the void the beautiful way and perspective you've just described it in. In fact as said to our dear Friend Teri above, I had an experience with it, and trust me, i never felt so scared in my life.
Had my brushes with death, but may be we are resigned to the fact of it, never felt scared, though others reacted with disdain at my reaction, or lack of it.
The space around- the credit my Friend goes to our wonderful peer Teri! for it.
welcome
once again
is the visit
the kind review
dear Friend.
appreciation.
immense.
is the Poet admired.
Welcome
is the review, kind.
truly blessed i feel
for the way and how you've conveyed your feeling upon reading this humble ink dear Friend. A source of joy for me today.
In all honesty, I never looked at the void the beautiful way and perspective you've just described it in. In fact as said to our dear Friend Teri above, I had an experience with it, and trust me, i never felt so scared in my life.
Had my brushes with death, but may be we are resigned to the fact of it, never felt scared, though others reacted with disdain at my reaction, or lack of it.
The space around- the credit my Friend goes to our wonderful peer Teri! for it.
welcome
once again
is the visit
the kind review
dear Friend.
appreciation.
immense.
