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Daughter
I look at her and my heart feels
every bit of love
every fallen tear
every silly grin
every wish so dear
every ounce of brave
every song she sings
every dance she twirls
every joy she brings
I look at her and my heart feels
every bit of love
every fallen tear
every silly grin
every wish so dear
every ounce of brave
every song she sings
every dance she twirls
every joy she brings
I look at her and my heart feels
Published 27th Mar 2018
| Edited 30th Mar 2018
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27th Mar 2018 8:52am
30th Mar 2018 5:50am
27th Mar 2018 11:17am
You have an extra "and" in your final line; no doubt and artifact resulting from cut n paste editing.
This poem benefits from your use of repetition. Well done.
This poem benefits from your use of repetition. Well done.
30th Mar 2018 5:50am
