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Knock knock
I don't want to know
for invisible lightning cracking on sunlit seas
but you - are
knock knock
walk in like you were never gone
smile like thunder never tried too long
to settle here
kiss me like we haven't been apart
longer than we were toxic
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I make you green tea at dusk
and the wine will leave us alone
in this old harbour
untouched by the world with her global disasters
I remember how our garden sparkled
if the morning was clean
and how the flowers fared in the end
Published 21st Mar 2018
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22nd Mar 2018 9:32pm
That is wonderful. Ethereal and yet grounded and intimate, beautiful marriage.
Hello and welcome back
lots to like about this piece. invisible lightning crackling on sunlit seas is clever, makes for a decent opening. gives a sight, sound, feeling.
there's a nice lyrical feel comes in with the end of the first stanza and the start of the second.
the contrasts are interesting. the storm, the harbour, the green tea at dusk, global disasters, sunlit seas.
anyhow, great you're posting. always a pleasure to read
*hat tip*
lots to like about this piece. invisible lightning crackling on sunlit seas is clever, makes for a decent opening. gives a sight, sound, feeling.
there's a nice lyrical feel comes in with the end of the first stanza and the start of the second.
the contrasts are interesting. the storm, the harbour, the green tea at dusk, global disasters, sunlit seas.
anyhow, great you're posting. always a pleasure to read
*hat tip*
3rd Feb 2019 6:23pm
18th Mar 2019 7:57pm
Just read this again for a second time and was just as satisfied as the first time. Awesome :)
