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Clever mechanisms for thoughtful mechanics
Quick draw Columbine
candle maker cut out early
eating barbwire fence for breakfast
on tombstone picnic tables
be my scenic leaf
autumn route road
smoke billows burning nostrils
3rd paper pink attendance write up
so i'm out the metal turn style door
today shall be a click top black ink pen stain
in the front right pocket
of my favorite Levi jeans
candle maker cut out early
eating barbwire fence for breakfast
on tombstone picnic tables
be my scenic leaf
autumn route road
smoke billows burning nostrils
3rd paper pink attendance write up
so i'm out the metal turn style door
today shall be a click top black ink pen stain
in the front right pocket
of my favorite Levi jeans
Published 9th Mar 2018
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9th Mar 2018 10:01pm
"eating barbwire fence for breakfast/on tombstone picnic tables" ... "be my scenic leaf/autumn route road" ... "today shall be a click top black ink pen stain/in the front right pocket/of my favorite Levi jeans" Such great imagery and ripe words in all of this. Bravo my dear poet, bravo!
9th Mar 2018 10:02pm
dearest Samael I see a master at work
this gave me a smile so very clever
thank you for coming through today with the sun :)
love Crim
this gave me a smile so very clever
thank you for coming through today with the sun :)
love Crim
9th Mar 2018 10:23pm
This first stanza seems like it's about a psychotic plot in it's infancy.
The second evokes imagery of floating fairies through a brown-y, orange-y path. Little devils throwing acorns as they go.
The third seems cold (in a good way), like you bring it all back down to earth and sensory material.
Great stuff man!
The second evokes imagery of floating fairies through a brown-y, orange-y path. Little devils throwing acorns as they go.
The third seems cold (in a good way), like you bring it all back down to earth and sensory material.
Great stuff man!
10th Mar 2018 5:42am
