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Whenever I Fall
In scabbard night spill radar flecks,
Of light's engage and disarray,
My jigsaw heart recounts your name.
A crowded house beneath your feet,
The fog swept sheets of Angels gone,
Awaiting never coming calls.
That youth, that ignorance's lust,
Passed unrelenting moon for love,
Frail wash of tears, I fall, I fall…
Of light's engage and disarray,
My jigsaw heart recounts your name.
A crowded house beneath your feet,
The fog swept sheets of Angels gone,
Awaiting never coming calls.
That youth, that ignorance's lust,
Passed unrelenting moon for love,
Frail wash of tears, I fall, I fall…
Published 7th Mar 2018
Author's Note
Late night listen to Crowded House's "Fall at Your Feet" took me back to Los Angeles mid-1980's (the capitalized Angels in line 2 of the second stanza implies location) and a girl I knew - thanks, Neil 😒.
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About a time of places & music & sex that I didn’t know about (not quite born yet I think) though in my home town. tommy, I love how the last stanza concludes, and then with “I fall, I fall...”.
Another RL to the queen’s quarters.🐯👑
Another RL to the queen’s quarters.🐯👑
14th Mar 2018 3:53pm
It turns out the song is from 1991, but the moment and memory is definitely mid-eighties and Los Angeles, Gardena and Manhattan Beach...
So glad that you got the intent and meaning.
tom cat
So glad that you got the intent and meaning.
tom cat
12th Mar 2018 3:19pm
I love crowded house and when I read your title I sang it out :)
A truly beautiful penned piece with sadness laced in its words.
A nice flow too
A truly beautiful penned piece with sadness laced in its words.
A nice flow too
14th Mar 2018 3:57pm
Thanks - I have not practiced my music for years, but have been working up this song. It's one of my favorites...
thanks for the comment... and the read...
geoff
thanks for the comment... and the read...
geoff
27th Mar 2018 10:37pm
this felt too sentimental for me. your diction is intriguing: "scabbard," "jigsaw," "Angeles," and etc.
27th Mar 2018 11:04pm
It was sentimental... As messages brought into your head by an old song almost always are... I am glad you picked up on that... Good read!
Geoff
Geoff
