deepundergroundpoetry.com
FOUR AT THE FENCE
Hey guys!
What’s you looking at
Oh HER, ain't she fine
lovely dark brown eyes
broad kind smile
seductive whinny
luxurious long chestnut mane
looks so sexy whipping in the wind
beautiful curves
playful tail
The pale, hairless, two-legged creature
says she stands 16 hands from her withers
Whatever that means
Oh and she’s got good teeth
So are you gonna ask her out?
Who me? Nah
I’m just a beast of burden
She’d never fall for a guy like me
Sweating under a hot Summer Sun
pulling a plow or cart
And in Wintertime
Freezing my ass off pulling some sleigh
Coming home beat tired every night
That’s no life for an elegant filly like her
Although she did glance over once
and wink...ah probably just a fly
What about you?
You’ve got an exciting life.
I’ll admit racing is a thrill
When I win
Which is less than half the time
Off the track it’s hell
Riding around in stuffy trailers
sleeping in strange barns
A lonely life really
I just couldn’t subject her to that
And what happens when I lose my speed?
My seed is not valuable enough
to do what this lucky stud does
What about you?
Me, oh hell no!
I’ve had way too many partners
And she knows it
I’m just some high priced sex worker
Who may be getting the best hay now
but just as soon as the juice is gone
the thrill is gone
Then I’ll be some boring washed up gigolo
I couldn’t abide seeing her in that life.
She deserves some energetic guy
Like you for instance
I do love jumping
But it’s risky
One missed fence
One knocked down rail
I could break my leg
And we all know
what happens then
BANG!
The anxiety would kill her
And what if we had foals and colts to feed
No, I’d never put her through that
Would you look at that so called stallion
What’s he do all day?
Chase butterflies, smell wildflowers
Some kinda poet I guess
Shhhhhhhh here he comes
Hey there! What’s going on?
Isn’t it a marvelous day?
Look at those clouds just awesome!
Wait! Look! He’s chasing her
WHOA! Is she nuzzling him?
GET A STALL!
I can’t bear to watch
What’s he doing now?
Damn! He’s up...he’s in
Come on guys
Let’s give them some privacy
Who would ever have figured?
Right?
What’s you looking at
Oh HER, ain't she fine
lovely dark brown eyes
broad kind smile
seductive whinny
luxurious long chestnut mane
looks so sexy whipping in the wind
beautiful curves
playful tail
The pale, hairless, two-legged creature
says she stands 16 hands from her withers
Whatever that means
Oh and she’s got good teeth
So are you gonna ask her out?
Who me? Nah
I’m just a beast of burden
She’d never fall for a guy like me
Sweating under a hot Summer Sun
pulling a plow or cart
And in Wintertime
Freezing my ass off pulling some sleigh
Coming home beat tired every night
That’s no life for an elegant filly like her
Although she did glance over once
and wink...ah probably just a fly
What about you?
You’ve got an exciting life.
I’ll admit racing is a thrill
When I win
Which is less than half the time
Off the track it’s hell
Riding around in stuffy trailers
sleeping in strange barns
A lonely life really
I just couldn’t subject her to that
And what happens when I lose my speed?
My seed is not valuable enough
to do what this lucky stud does
What about you?
Me, oh hell no!
I’ve had way too many partners
And she knows it
I’m just some high priced sex worker
Who may be getting the best hay now
but just as soon as the juice is gone
the thrill is gone
Then I’ll be some boring washed up gigolo
I couldn’t abide seeing her in that life.
She deserves some energetic guy
Like you for instance
I do love jumping
But it’s risky
One missed fence
One knocked down rail
I could break my leg
And we all know
what happens then
BANG!
The anxiety would kill her
And what if we had foals and colts to feed
No, I’d never put her through that
Would you look at that so called stallion
What’s he do all day?
Chase butterflies, smell wildflowers
Some kinda poet I guess
Shhhhhhhh here he comes
Hey there! What’s going on?
Isn’t it a marvelous day?
Look at those clouds just awesome!
Wait! Look! He’s chasing her
WHOA! Is she nuzzling him?
GET A STALL!
I can’t bear to watch
What’s he doing now?
Damn! He’s up...he’s in
Come on guys
Let’s give them some privacy
Who would ever have figured?
Right?
Published 2nd Mar 2018
| Edited 5th Mar 2018
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 9
reading list entries 0
comments 19
reads 629
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
3rd Mar 2018 00:09am
3rd Mar 2018 00:13am
Thank you Dizzy! Not necessarily my best poetry but a fun dialog to write nonetheless.
3rd Mar 2018 6:05am
3rd Mar 2018 7:27am
Thank you Rose! It was inspired my a horse loving, beautiful friend. Cheers!
Anonymous
3rd Mar 2018 8:25am
Woah there, this is brilliant Bob :) Packed with fun but with some interesting interchange carrying messaging beyond. Love this.
Title too... Great write ;)
Title too... Great write ;)
3rd Mar 2018 8:35am
Thank you so much Sophie. I am glad you like the piece. I thought it would be an interesting study of relationships and self esteem. I tried ti find a picture that fit but I then I thought it best for the reader to paint that picture in their heads. You and your love of horses inspired the write.
3rd Mar 2018 9:35pm
A thrilling look inside the equine mind, but It seems that stallions have most of the fun. "Get a stall!" Very clever and funny write.
3rd Mar 2018 9:51pm
Thank you Sir Crow! I like people to laugh with a piece like this because I certainly did when I wrote it
Smiles come to my face when reading this. The intriguing title got my attention, and the whole piece is just full of fun scenes and dialogues. I envy you have horses to look at and write about. Moreover, I am impressed with the beauty of the female horse and love you said the stallion is" Some kinda poet".
"So are you gonna ask her out?" when I knew you're talking about a beautiful horse, ha! I did laugh.
Brilliant and skilled write. Glad to read this to energize my day!
much love
RoseJasmine
"So are you gonna ask her out?" when I knew you're talking about a beautiful horse, ha! I did laugh.
Brilliant and skilled write. Glad to read this to energize my day!
much love
RoseJasmine
5th Mar 2018 3:43pm
This one is so much fun, love how this conservation could occur on different planes (equestrian and dare it say it ... human) This is so hard to do, and you made it look effortless
5th Mar 2018 4:17pm
Thank you so much Dragonfly, you understand me so well! It was indeed my intent to have these horse fellows converse on a human level. I think it's fun to imagine animals with our same insecurities, flaws, and good qualities. Dare I say this is a exploration of my own psyche. I have had at least the beast of burden conversation with myself but never had the stud dilemma.
Anonymous
7th Mar 2018 3:07am
This is great like hopping into a guys thoughts insecurities hopes.
7th Mar 2018 3:27am
Thank you so much, Nourish! You read my intentions so well. Muy amable!
Besitos!
Besitos!
7th Mar 2018 12:36pm
I enjoyed the humour of this GW and mind wondered off...
and then the spirited stallion gallops off down the dusty to the palomino princess (never trust a poet)...and beauty, well, after many dressage jumps and whinnying at the chaff bucket, finally convinces the beast that her shit does stink, though flies, well they were never a problem.
and then the spirited stallion gallops off down the dusty to the palomino princess (never trust a poet)...and beauty, well, after many dressage jumps and whinnying at the chaff bucket, finally convinces the beast that her shit does stink, though flies, well they were never a problem.
7th Mar 2018 4:14pm
Thank you LadyRain! I enjoy very much your embellishments :) I had fun writing this piece.
10th Mar 2018 9:35am
i love this ! it seems no horse felt good enough for her. i love the ending with reference to getting a stall . fun , positive and light-hearted read which i very much enjoyed
10th Mar 2018 9:50am
Thank you Daffodil! Except for that darn poet horse :) I thought I'd make some parallels with real life and how it's the risk takers that are rewarded. I really appreciate your comment.
10th Mar 2018 9:57am
yes, and i see your point . those horses who felt insecure and unworthy of her attention ... they were not rewarded , the stallion was , it seems he had the confidence to take a risk !
10th Mar 2018 10:00am
