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in white
You look better
in the light
in white
a kiss would have sufficed
in eyes , like Christ
I felt heavy hearts
exhausted fights
you longed for days
carried the
nights
I could long
for weight in this
waiting
for the sun to rise
for moments that hold you
until
you die
in the light
in white
a kiss would have sufficed
in eyes , like Christ
I felt heavy hearts
exhausted fights
you longed for days
carried the
nights
I could long
for weight in this
waiting
for the sun to rise
for moments that hold you
until
you die
Published 26th Feb 2018
Author's Note
Another one from two years ago, i have some writers block this month.
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26th Feb 2018 7:17pm
5th Mar 2018 4:47pm
1st Mar 2018 2:29pm
This reads beautifully sad. It took me for a long while to think what to comment. The final few lines made me speechless. I thought in white means a lovely wedding but eventually it seemed not like that...anyway, I love this for the words, for the sincere affection.
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine
5th Mar 2018 4:47pm
thank you again rose :) this was after a break up, but i was also falling in love too...
another old one from three years ago
hopefully ill have some new stuff to share with you soon
love marielle
another old one from three years ago
hopefully ill have some new stuff to share with you soon
love marielle
6th Mar 2018 5:23am
I am, like Rosjasmine, left without words to describe why I like this piece I just do. Brava!
8th Mar 2018 12:12pm
Bravo my dear poetess. Love the flow and short lines of this, flawless line breaks. It emotes and evokes so beautifully
Anonymous
22nd Apr 2018 5:29pm
I find the ending to be flawless. "For moments that hold you until you die" - you couldn't have chosen anything better
