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COULD HAVE BEEN LOVER
On an errand for the firm
ancient, post-quake
dingy, San Francisco
15 floor high-rise
waiting to descend
she by my side
eyes lock, speak
deep brown to deep brown
simpatico, I’m kind so are you
sea-foam green bandanna
covers long, nearly black hair
a killer I know you-I accept you smile
synapsis explode
mind future races
much too brief nights
filled with genuine passion, ecstasy
long deep kisses
naked mornings
walking , hands clasped
amongst primeval redwoods
late night beach campfire snuggles
candlelit Sausalito dinners
Mallorca honeymoon
Sunset District,1940’s bungalow
2 girls,1 boy, a chocolate labrador
10 grandchildren...
Elevator door slides open
spell bursts
creaking downward
two alone, sideways glances
“Hi, how are you?”
sultry mezzo “Fine”
“Beautiful day,” “Totally”
“Take care,” “You too”
longing last look
sweet “See ya later”
regret laden “Bye”
17 years ago
ancient, post-quake
dingy, San Francisco
15 floor high-rise
waiting to descend
she by my side
eyes lock, speak
deep brown to deep brown
simpatico, I’m kind so are you
sea-foam green bandanna
covers long, nearly black hair
a killer I know you-I accept you smile
synapsis explode
mind future races
much too brief nights
filled with genuine passion, ecstasy
long deep kisses
naked mornings
walking , hands clasped
amongst primeval redwoods
late night beach campfire snuggles
candlelit Sausalito dinners
Mallorca honeymoon
Sunset District,1940’s bungalow
2 girls,1 boy, a chocolate labrador
10 grandchildren...
Elevator door slides open
spell bursts
creaking downward
two alone, sideways glances
“Hi, how are you?”
sultry mezzo “Fine”
“Beautiful day,” “Totally”
“Take care,” “You too”
longing last look
sweet “See ya later”
regret laden “Bye”
17 years ago
Published 2nd Feb 2018
| Edited 4th Feb 2018
Author's Note
Inspired by the "Strange Romance" competition.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Anonymous
3rd Feb 2018 6:50am
You can definitely feel the electric chemistry between these two.
I like how you delivered this. With longing and regret.
I like how you delivered this. With longing and regret.
3rd Feb 2018 7:14am
Thank you Ani! This actually happened to me, okay without the dreamscape, When our eyes met waiting for the elevator it was as if we had been lovers in another life. I don't know that I've ever felt immediately attracted to anyone since.
Anonymous
3rd Feb 2018 8:51am
Nothing quite like the feeling of that kind of connection, it springs upon us when least expected - sometimes it’s at a good time, sometimes not so much...
Great write Bob :)
Great write Bob :)
3rd Feb 2018 8:58am
Thank you so much awesome-named Sophie! Unfortunately this one fell in the "not so much" category.
3rd Feb 2018 11:14pm
Beautiful piece on the "what ifs" in life that leave us not only questioning, but feed our imaginations as well.
Well done Bob, you had me there, observing.
Well done Bob, you had me there, observing.
3rd Feb 2018 11:36pm
Glad you came along! Thank you Teri it makes me happy to know I painted vividly.
Anonymous
4th Feb 2018 4:17am
such a lovely story capturing the precious details. Great work 👌🏻
4th Feb 2018 5:56am
Muchisimas gracias, Nourish. I am glad you like this piece of nonfiction...at least everything except the fantasy. Muy amable.
26th May 2020 11:51pm
You really captured the feelings that come from a missed connection when you instantly share a strong attraction with someone but it is not acted on. Beautiful writing.
27th May 2020 00:45am
Thank you so much Kristina. I an still see her face, especially her smile.
