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green loogie
spit on my fiery passion
& put it out
don't leave me to burn
with a heart that feels too much
every slight of a calloused hand
that rather turn & attack
than really understand
that if I say my skies are grey
it is a factual observation
not a tactic to get you to sit
under a false sun
that scorches your tender skin
& fails to warm
rarely do I reach out
or bother corresponding
with anyone
I let you fly a kite in my sky
not complaining about the
telephone wires
of miscommunication
that kept popping up
tangling the kite I lend you
mine is an Earth friendly zone
i'd rather sit silent in the garden
saying om of tranquility
than listen to the rumbling
of a subway
endlessly switching tracks
turning back on its self
undisciplined minds are
unsightly
as dirty underwear
left in my living room
you came in with your anger
& left muddy boot prints
on my trampled psyche
with a sigh & an exhale I let it all go
because you want to be a
speed demon
when my freeway only goes 45
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31st Jan 2018 5:21am
thank you beautiful Daniella for getting this poem yes I will be more guarded now we shall learn together beautiful :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
Anonymous
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Anonymous
31st Jan 2018 6:18am
My love, at times we make choices to open ourselves to others, repeatedly even when communication issues exist, trying to overcome by working with or at times around them...wires crossing over and over and sometimes one needs to be freed of them...frustration clearly felt in this ink...
I love you fiercely
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn
I love you fiercely
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn
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Re: Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 11:46pm
thank you my love yes this was an error in judgement in opening myself to this person.. wires were crossed to the point of emotional exhaustion..
I love you passionatedly
I deeply cherish your understanding..
love Brenda
I love you passionatedly
I deeply cherish your understanding..
love Brenda
Re. green loogie
31st Jan 2018 6:29am
that if I say my skies are grey
it is a factual observation
not a tactic to get you to sit
under a false sun
that scorches your tender skin
& fails to warm ...
Oh loving this write
Especially the lines above
Much love sending to you ❤❤
it is a factual observation
not a tactic to get you to sit
under a false sun
that scorches your tender skin
& fails to warm ...
Oh loving this write
Especially the lines above
Much love sending to you ❤❤
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Re: Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 11:48pm
thank you graciously beautiful Rose
it's a pleasure seeing you here :)
much love lovely one..
Crim
it's a pleasure seeing you here :)
much love lovely one..
Crim
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Anonymous
31st Jan 2018 11:16am
Remarkable write! Succinctly captures the dilemma of compromise. Shit aint it? Being true to oneself, strength amongst the rubble, seems to be the key. Rob x
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Re: Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 11:49pm
thank you dearest Rob
yes I compromised the sanctity
of my own peace with this person..
love Brenda
yes I compromised the sanctity
of my own peace with this person..
love Brenda
Anonymous
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Re: Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 11:51pm
thank you graciously beautiful Kat yeah they wanted it all now & didn't understand I don't move that fast in any kind of relationship..
I cherish your thoughts dear one..
love Brenda
I cherish your thoughts dear one..
love Brenda
Re. green loogie
31st Jan 2018 4:26pm
This brilliant composition is a great exhale for me, Brenda, at the end of which I felt totally washed and relaxed. You don't have to let go that which you don't hold on to.
Much love...David
Much love...David
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Re: Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 11:51pm
thank you graciously dearest David
i'm happy the ending gave you the release it did me..
love Brenda
i'm happy the ending gave you the release it did me..
love Brenda
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Anonymous
31st Jan 2018 5:54pm
there you go again
always comin with that heavy hitting poetry!!!
"undisciplined minds are
unsightly
as dirty underwear
left in my living room "
this here will be added to my daily lexicon..
thank you Crim!!!
always comin with that heavy hitting poetry!!!
"undisciplined minds are
unsightly
as dirty underwear
left in my living room "
this here will be added to my daily lexicon..
thank you Crim!!!
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Re: Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 11:52pm
thank you graciously Naajir
for showing love on this write..
love that you will be using that bit :)
love Crim
for showing love on this write..
love that you will be using that bit :)
love Crim
Re. green loogie
31st Jan 2018 8:46pm
Glad to hear you're keeping it down to 45 these days. And you can do without that demonic rage. You write with a cool head here, and it's brilliant. Ommmm...
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1st Feb 2018 11:53pm
Re. green loogie
31st Jan 2018 9:39pm
Crimsin, this is badass. You managed to speak fire with a chilling breath. Masterfully written
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1st Feb 2018 11:54pm
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1st Feb 2018 00:22am
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1st Feb 2018 11:55pm
thank you graciously Poet
your comment gifted me the biggest smile :)
love you..
Brenda
your comment gifted me the biggest smile :)
love you..
Brenda
Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 3:43am
Become what you are screamed Nietzsche...few are born to command in love...so many born to be enslaved. Damn! I truly love this ink Brenda...sounds like a Camus prayer to freedom.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 11:56pm
thank you graciously dearest Harry I always learn something new from you..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Anonymous
1st Feb 2018 2:21pm
I guess life on the fast lane isn't all what its cracked up to be
A unique take of anger
Well done crimsin
Love
A unique take of anger
Well done crimsin
Love
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Re: Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 11:57pm
thank you beautiful Autumn yeah I like to take it slow in relationships..
love Crimsin
love Crimsin
Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 2:42pm
Love this Brenda. If they can't compliment you and only complicate you, it is time for them to leave. Brilliant
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Re: Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 11:58pm
thank you graciously dearest Tim for understanding.. I cherish you thoughts & visits..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Anonymous
1st Feb 2018 3:21pm
Breathe deep, beautiful, and wash that muck away. Let fresh air fill your lungs once more. Such a beautiful and compassionate poem when your environment has been muddied. I love you
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. green loogie
1st Feb 2018 11:59pm
thank you beautiful Willow for the calming words deep breath & sigh I feel better :)
I love you..
love Brenda
I love you..
love Brenda
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Anonymous
1st Feb 2018 5:45pm
Great stories of heartache fall veiled in the land of oz. You.'re steady with.such ruby slippers. Be well be diligent and perceptive it.too.shall pass
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Re: Re. green loogie
2nd Feb 2018 00:00am
thank you graciously dearest Sinister One for such an awesome comment :)
love Crim
love Crim