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Straight And Narrow Path
Tomorrow isn't promised so make each moment count
For in the blink of an eye either you or I can be taken out
Trying times bring tears to our eyes causing all of our cries
I'm feeling more and more like I'm living behind enemy lines
Where many folks disguised as your allies plot your demise
Making it harder to differentiate between the good & bad guys
I now realize that I must militarize & plot using my third eye as my guide
Strategizing on how to keep fighting & surviving these mountainous rides
Utilizing run flat tires while ripping & running out in these streets
Better to be judged by 12 than carried by 6 so invest in some heat
The police can't protect you nor me so they clean up the aftermath
All we can do is compute the math and try the straight & narrow path
For in the blink of an eye either you or I can be taken out
Trying times bring tears to our eyes causing all of our cries
I'm feeling more and more like I'm living behind enemy lines
Where many folks disguised as your allies plot your demise
Making it harder to differentiate between the good & bad guys
I now realize that I must militarize & plot using my third eye as my guide
Strategizing on how to keep fighting & surviving these mountainous rides
Utilizing run flat tires while ripping & running out in these streets
Better to be judged by 12 than carried by 6 so invest in some heat
The police can't protect you nor me so they clean up the aftermath
All we can do is compute the math and try the straight & narrow path
Published 20th Jan 2018
| Edited 23rd Jul 2018
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21st Jan 2018 9:01pm
Good work, Dude... I'm impressed... excellent command of the language...
which gives you a helluva handle on the tools of the trade
Makes all the difference.
This one was a joy to read.. now I'm off to look at the rest. Write On! ...and thanks for the good read... Ely
PS... just one little thing... if you don't mind?
Second Stanza, Line 1)... rather than, "plot on your demise", I would remove (on) and say ... *plot your demise* instead... "On" is not needed and it smooths the rythm.
Just my humble opinion... use it if you wish to. Thanks for listening. E
which gives you a helluva handle on the tools of the trade
Makes all the difference.
This one was a joy to read.. now I'm off to look at the rest. Write On! ...and thanks for the good read... Ely
PS... just one little thing... if you don't mind?
Second Stanza, Line 1)... rather than, "plot on your demise", I would remove (on) and say ... *plot your demise* instead... "On" is not needed and it smooths the rythm.
Just my humble opinion... use it if you wish to. Thanks for listening. E
23rd Jul 2018 3:59pm
Thanks for your compliment, feedback and suggestion. I appreciate it.
23rd Jul 2018 4:13pm
Less a compliment than an observation... and I find it refreshing to read something by a person who gives a shit about getting the most out of our language... (My bias is showing... ) thanks, Ely
