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The Hopeless Poem
In mind
helpless
A fate inescapable
to flee
black hole of thoughts
Universe
the many galaxies
spinning & spinning
with stars of mind...
They form into one
a brain
Crashes of meteors
a disaster embedded
Yet I cannot shake the feeling...
of loneliness and emptiness
with company of chaotic emotions
Stars seem to glimmer
yet their beauty I cannot eye
although filled with light
I am filled with none
Heart used like rags
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate
Of self, the emptiness
Wringed out of love
it hurts to care
I hate to love
Feeling empty
an exoskeleton
useless
Is there any life in me left?
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a poem of free write
thought many could agree despite the lack of editing..
I tried to fix it up a bit
but to all who feel hopeless after being madly in love
then that love being wasted in the end
also for those who just feel hopeless...
you are not alone
helpless
A fate inescapable
to flee
black hole of thoughts
Universe
the many galaxies
spinning & spinning
with stars of mind...
They form into one
a brain
Crashes of meteors
a disaster embedded
Yet I cannot shake the feeling...
of loneliness and emptiness
with company of chaotic emotions
Stars seem to glimmer
yet their beauty I cannot eye
although filled with light
I am filled with none
Heart used like rags
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate
Of self, the emptiness
Wringed out of love
it hurts to care
I hate to love
Feeling empty
an exoskeleton
useless
Is there any life in me left?
-------------------------------------------------------------------
a poem of free write
thought many could agree despite the lack of editing..
I tried to fix it up a bit
but to all who feel hopeless after being madly in love
then that love being wasted in the end
also for those who just feel hopeless...
you are not alone
Written by
SourMelon0313
(H)
Published 12th Jan 2018
| Edited 15th Jan 2018
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Re. The Hopeless Poem
12th Jan 2018 8:01am
Although the stars we see may already be dead, that doesn’t make them any less beautiful.
I like the concept of this poem :)
I like the concept of this poem :)
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 3:12am
There are times, when one can be filled with love
then be turned to be full of space
Thank you, and I appreciate your visit :)
<3
H
then be turned to be full of space
Thank you, and I appreciate your visit :)
<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
You write so beautifully H! I can relate o every word. The pain is expressed exactly as I feel it.
"Heart used like rags
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate"
The imagery and metaphor is perfectly clear!
JJ
"Heart used like rags
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate"
The imagery and metaphor is perfectly clear!
JJ
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 3:14am
I am so glad you can feel...
and that you see such beauty that you speak of..
Thank you, so very much dear JJ...
I am so grateful for your understanding of this feeling despite the needed editing.. I must come back when my heart is settled from this..
<3
H
and that you see such beauty that you speak of..
Thank you, so very much dear JJ...
I am so grateful for your understanding of this feeling despite the needed editing.. I must come back when my heart is settled from this..
<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
12th Jan 2018 1:15pm
This is me in a nut shell H,
I never thought anyone truly got it till I read this
Thank you for shinning a light in the darkness
I never thought anyone truly got it till I read this
Thank you for shinning a light in the darkness
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 3:15am
Thank you so much for the RL and your sharing of your feels!
Glad I was able to shine light....:)
<3
H
Glad I was able to shine light....:)
<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
12th Jan 2018 1:39pm
I actually fought back the tears reading this. It's reeking with a heavy air of sadness, deeply expressive darkness...
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 3:17am
Oh dear poet!
Your heart is so pure..
thank you so much for feeling my work.. yes,
oh , the depths of where our hearts go when lost in shadows!
Your heart.. is not wasted for I very much appreciate :)
<3
H
Your heart is so pure..
thank you so much for feeling my work.. yes,
oh , the depths of where our hearts go when lost in shadows!
Your heart.. is not wasted for I very much appreciate :)
<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
12th Jan 2018 3:09pm
There is no hope...which is why I am so optimistic. It makes sense if you are "Buddhist."
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 3:20am
Hope...
a good sense to keep at times
yet when lost it breaks... us in many ways...
it's good to have optimistic minds to rise up again
to erase those gloom away
I deeply respect..
thank you so much for your lovely visit :)
<3
H
a good sense to keep at times
yet when lost it breaks... us in many ways...
it's good to have optimistic minds to rise up again
to erase those gloom away
I deeply respect..
thank you so much for your lovely visit :)
<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
Anonymous
12th Jan 2018 11:01pm
My heart aches reading of your sadness... I can truly relate to how these feelings can leave you feeling crushed, exhausted to your very bare bones...
Hugs <3
Hugs <3
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 3:22am
Thank you so much for your true feelings!
Yes, it can leave us to feel like a space of pure exhausted air..
I am cozy to your embrace...
Lovee<333<3
H
Yes, it can leave us to feel like a space of pure exhausted air..
I am cozy to your embrace...
Lovee<333<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 9:15am
Heart used like rags
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate
My heart breaks for you, I can feel your pain leap off your words .
Sending lots of love 🌹
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate
My heart breaks for you, I can feel your pain leap off your words .
Sending lots of love 🌹
1
Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 9:15am
Heart used like rags
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate
My heart breaks for you, I can feel your pain leap off your words .
Sending lots of love 🌹
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate
My heart breaks for you, I can feel your pain leap off your words .
Sending lots of love 🌹
1
Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 8:04pm
Thank you so much dear wicked... you are so kind... :)
I greatly appreciate your heart and love to these...
Lovee <33
H
I greatly appreciate your heart and love to these...
Lovee <33
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
Anonymous
13th Jan 2018 9:40am
Ahhh Sour, I relate to this write very deeply. It hurt my heart!
Great write either way, sending you love!
Great write either way, sending you love!
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 8:06pm
With your love, and depth...
I am very lucky to be given such
Thank you so much
you are a shining star..
<3
H
I am very lucky to be given such
Thank you so much
you are a shining star..
<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 8:07pm
My friend there is enough life left in you to continue to write beautiful pieces of art but I understand where you are coming from and understand those exact same feelings. Love and respect from me to you in hopes that it cheers you up! Keep on writing!
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
13th Jan 2018 8:13pm
Thank you so much dear Tyler... my friend..
your encouragement and love gives me great feelings..
I greatly appreciate your understanding..
I have blessed with such love given from dear poetess/ poets like you and all the others who've visited..
Lovveee<3<333
H
your encouragement and love gives me great feelings..
I greatly appreciate your understanding..
I have blessed with such love given from dear poetess/ poets like you and all the others who've visited..
Lovveee<3<333
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
Anonymous
13th Jan 2018 11:14pm
Heart used like rags
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate
very descriptive verse
great piece
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate
very descriptive verse
great piece
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
14th Jan 2018 7:51am
Thank you so much..
yet there's still some work that needs to be done...I shall come back..
Thank you for your wonderful visit:)
<3
H
yet there's still some work that needs to be done...I shall come back..
Thank you for your wonderful visit:)
<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
14th Jan 2018 3:43am
Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
14th Jan 2018 7:52am
Re. The Hopeless Poem
17th Jan 2018 10:37pm
"Heart used like rags
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate
Of self, the emptiness
Wringed out of love
it hurts to care
I hate to love
Feeling empty
an exoskeleton
useless
Is there any life in me left?"
Wonderful!..I love it
I didn't feel hopeless...almost like the words were pushing that away...How did you do that?
love
Jeff
to clean traces of agony across face
then drenched in dirt of hate
Of self, the emptiness
Wringed out of love
it hurts to care
I hate to love
Feeling empty
an exoskeleton
useless
Is there any life in me left?"
Wonderful!..I love it
I didn't feel hopeless...almost like the words were pushing that away...How did you do that?
love
Jeff
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
18th Jan 2018 00:06am
Well your words are too great..
lol thank you Jeff
hopelessness is a feeling that shadows so much light in our lives..
I wished to leave those who've felt that way accompanied...
Grateful..
<3
H
lol thank you Jeff
hopelessness is a feeling that shadows so much light in our lives..
I wished to leave those who've felt that way accompanied...
Grateful..
<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
18th Jan 2018 2:41am
what a beautiful poem and a beautiful message - hopelessness is a sure fire killer of will and motivation :-(((
beautifully penned scribe :-))))))))))))))))))))
Hugs :-))))))))))))
beautifully penned scribe :-))))))))))))))))))))
Hugs :-))))))))))))
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
18th Jan 2018 7:06pm
Well you've breathed to me beautiful words...
Thank you dear david! :)
I greatly appreciate your words..
<3<3
H
Thank you dear david! :)
I greatly appreciate your words..
<3<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
18th Jan 2018 4:32pm
The feeling of emptiness is one among many you write with a poet's gift. I felt the emotions here like fading galaxies. Your words showed me a star swallowed by a black hole. I am amazed by how you write.
Feeling empty
an exoskeleton
useless
Is there any life in me left?
Hugs and Love,
John
Feeling empty
an exoskeleton
useless
Is there any life in me left?
Hugs and Love,
John
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
18th Jan 2018 7:08pm
Oh John..
your words are so kind to me
I always love your wonderful visits
thank you so much in sharing this intergalactic space journey
of emotions with me..
<3<3
H
your words are so kind to me
I always love your wonderful visits
thank you so much in sharing this intergalactic space journey
of emotions with me..
<3<3
H
Re. The Hopeless Poem
15th Mar 2018 7:52pm
This speaks to exactly where I am at the moment, H, and very nicely done. Concomitant is the decision to not be victimized by anyone, including myself. Not easy but quite necessary in order to keep my balance.
Much love...David
Much love...David
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Re: Re. The Hopeless Poem
15th Mar 2018 10:13pm
Thank you very much David! :)
I am glad my words spoke to you...
To keep balance...
to be in tune..
Much appreciations & love
H
I am glad my words spoke to you...
To keep balance...
to be in tune..
Much appreciations & love
H