Breath of a Pen

Lyrically crisp, flowing rapidly inks blood
on the page...very impressive lady :)

What a grand compliment! Thank you lovely. My attempt to capture and describe what I read here. Always grateful for your support! Happy New Year kind friend😊

I've the title and sentiment, Mel. Ink is to pens what air is to humans: Life.

Because you have requested Honest Critique ( and I know you truly appreciate it ), try it by subtracting the unnecessary wordage below.

For example, 'of' is used 3x's. That may not sound like a lot, but for a short verse it's repetitive.

Breath of a Pen

Entrancing the mind
once and again
affording breath[ ; ]
[with] strokes of a pen

Purely inspired
elements ascribed
[to] raw emotion
quill transcribed

Opaque expressions
[of] profound thought
connected, revealing
perceptions wrought

Capturing pathos
[of] human condition
be it melancholy
or joyous disposition

Images in language
a lyrical stage
feelings exposed
framed on a page

That's all I can honestly recommend, as this is exceptional. I Love that you'he eschewed line capitalization as well.

Nicely done.

May your New Year be blessed with much Love and Happiness. 🎊❤

Dear Ahavati,
I thank you as always and do very much appreciate. I take in and try to apply what is learned here😊. I am pleased you enjoyed.

Very best wishes for the new year to you as well lovely. Xxx

This is really pretty, and nicely written, it reminded me of white linen in a soft summer breeze, poetically, like the white linen is the blank page and the sun's rays are the emotions penned...

Wow! What an amazing reply. I am honoured that this poem evoked such a response. I truly appreciate such a lovely compliment... very kind indeed. Much love to you friend.

I found this write to be inspiring and so beautifully crafted - as always your inking is excellent :-))))

Capturing pathos
[of] human condition
be it melancholy
or joyous disposition  - - - perfect :-)))))

Thank you David,
I appreciate your feedback very much. It is always heartfelt.

be it melancholy
or joyous disposition

Not surprised you enjoyed this part as you write exceptionally well from both.  Much love dear friend.

Loved the rhyme and rhythm...

Thank you kindly bc:)

this is a very smooth vibe filled with inspiring sentiments..

lovely!!

Thank you kindly Naajir. Your response is much appreciated.
Mel

Mel, a beautiful homage to this craft we all love. Brava!

Thank you dear friend.😘

I bet this rolls off the tongue with ease when read allowed, but I prefer to read in silence since I'm almost always surrounded by the noise. This is a grand distraction.

Thank you kindly SE. I am happy you enjoy it silently.  I appreciate you taking the time to read and offer feedback.