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Light in the Dark
Dont show me a light in the darkness
only to tear it away
leave me isolated and blind in emptiness
fumbling for a grasp at a reality
where you no longer exist
vulnerable to each word you say
my heart is now an open wound
it took some time but i let my walls cave
I swooned and i fell and i lost the way
dont leave me to die
I need you to stay
Because i fall too soon
and i love so hard
hopelessly falling into your gravity
a shooting star and i came so far
flying from a dismal reality
I saw the light of your sun
the love of your world
I fled from the darkness
and into your arms
and i have never fallen like this
your kiss and the touch of your lips
you run your fingers through my hair
and tenderly hold my face and chin
so softly you speak
and when you look in my eyes
I can't help but to smile
and no matter the time
you make me want to stay awhile..
and i fear you will push me away
I fear you will shut the door in my face
brandish a blade and leave it in my chest
for the most successful of killers
are the ones who show love best
so as i lay here and think of you
I ask for only one thing..
to not show me a light in the darkness
just to tear it away
only to tear it away
leave me isolated and blind in emptiness
fumbling for a grasp at a reality
where you no longer exist
vulnerable to each word you say
my heart is now an open wound
it took some time but i let my walls cave
I swooned and i fell and i lost the way
dont leave me to die
I need you to stay
Because i fall too soon
and i love so hard
hopelessly falling into your gravity
a shooting star and i came so far
flying from a dismal reality
I saw the light of your sun
the love of your world
I fled from the darkness
and into your arms
and i have never fallen like this
your kiss and the touch of your lips
you run your fingers through my hair
and tenderly hold my face and chin
so softly you speak
and when you look in my eyes
I can't help but to smile
and no matter the time
you make me want to stay awhile..
and i fear you will push me away
I fear you will shut the door in my face
brandish a blade and leave it in my chest
for the most successful of killers
are the ones who show love best
so as i lay here and think of you
I ask for only one thing..
to not show me a light in the darkness
just to tear it away
Published 30th Dec 2017
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4th Jan 2018 2:13am
Beautiful poem. You conveyed very well the narrator's desperation to not be left in the darkness.
Well done!
Well done!
7th Jan 2018 5:21pm
The feeling of being toyed with emotionally
i love that second stanza
"my heart is now an open wound
it took some time but i let my walls cave
I swooned and i fell and i lost the way
don't leave me to die "- so vulnerable , relinquish my defense mechanisms
"i fall too soon
and i love so hard
hopelessly falling into your gravity "- throwing everything you have at it, full on assault of Love and release
"I saw the light of your sun
the love of your world
I fled from the darkness
and into your arms" - you were refuge, i was the hunted
"you run your fingers through my hair
and tenderly hold my face and chin"- so delicate this life is and so fragile to be pushed over the edge
this 5th stanza is amazing
" i fear you will push me away
I fear you will shut the door in my face
brandish a blade and leave it in my chest
for the most successful of killers
are the ones who show love best " bravo,bravo. weather you took your time with this or it just rolled off the end of your pen, it paid off. we could bathe in this line like fresh warm soapy bathtub water.color me purple because we're reading royal lines fit for the courts ears.you just robbed words from the rich and gave to the poor waiting for a write to set us free.
"so as i lay here and think of you
I ask for only one thing..
to not show me a light in the darkness
just to tear it away" -we reject the very Love we seek,that we sought. Love can tear us apart like wild animals in the wild of the night, none will survive till' the dawn.
a fantastic write fieryangelsouljia
well penned, i look forward to reading more from you in the future.
i love that second stanza
"my heart is now an open wound
it took some time but i let my walls cave
I swooned and i fell and i lost the way
don't leave me to die "- so vulnerable , relinquish my defense mechanisms
"i fall too soon
and i love so hard
hopelessly falling into your gravity "- throwing everything you have at it, full on assault of Love and release
"I saw the light of your sun
the love of your world
I fled from the darkness
and into your arms" - you were refuge, i was the hunted
"you run your fingers through my hair
and tenderly hold my face and chin"- so delicate this life is and so fragile to be pushed over the edge
this 5th stanza is amazing
" i fear you will push me away
I fear you will shut the door in my face
brandish a blade and leave it in my chest
for the most successful of killers
are the ones who show love best " bravo,bravo. weather you took your time with this or it just rolled off the end of your pen, it paid off. we could bathe in this line like fresh warm soapy bathtub water.color me purple because we're reading royal lines fit for the courts ears.you just robbed words from the rich and gave to the poor waiting for a write to set us free.
"so as i lay here and think of you
I ask for only one thing..
to not show me a light in the darkness
just to tear it away" -we reject the very Love we seek,that we sought. Love can tear us apart like wild animals in the wild of the night, none will survive till' the dawn.
a fantastic write fieryangelsouljia
well penned, i look forward to reading more from you in the future.
7th Jan 2018 8:29pm
I am glad you enjoyed this piece Samael. I look forward to checking out your works and reading what you have as well :)
