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Flipping Burgers
A piece of meat sizzles on a greasy grill surrounded by crackling onions
Juices seeping from each until they blend into each other's cracks
The flavor is palpable from my seat at the lonesome lunch counter
Where I've been patiently waiting for a taste of the succulent burger
The chef flips the round ground-round until perfectly browned
With just enough pink in the center to remind me of the blood
That once flowed through the flesh of a warm-blooded beast
That faded to cold before being frozen and hung on a captain's hook
When suddenly it's done, topped with a melting dollop of cheddar
My hunger outdone only by my anticipation of a delightful feast
As the waitress plates the tasty treat all dressed with fried onions
Then sets my meal in front of another hungry man at the same counter
And I wonder what happened to the one that I wanted just a moment ago
But love is so fleeting and I realize this ogre's layers were never meant for a princess
Juices seeping from each until they blend into each other's cracks
The flavor is palpable from my seat at the lonesome lunch counter
Where I've been patiently waiting for a taste of the succulent burger
The chef flips the round ground-round until perfectly browned
With just enough pink in the center to remind me of the blood
That once flowed through the flesh of a warm-blooded beast
That faded to cold before being frozen and hung on a captain's hook
When suddenly it's done, topped with a melting dollop of cheddar
My hunger outdone only by my anticipation of a delightful feast
As the waitress plates the tasty treat all dressed with fried onions
Then sets my meal in front of another hungry man at the same counter
And I wonder what happened to the one that I wanted just a moment ago
But love is so fleeting and I realize this ogre's layers were never meant for a princess
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Re. Flipping Burgers
Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 7:53pm
Even Shrek found his princess. Your layers haven't failed you yet. :-)
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Re: Re. Flipping Burgers
18th Dec 2017 8:07pm
But even Fiona wasn't what she appeared to be. shrek got lucky, I got burnt onions... Check please!
Thanks for the optimistic comment Willow!
JJ
Thanks for the optimistic comment Willow!
JJ
Re: Re. Flipping Burgers
Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 8:53pm
Actually, Fiona was exactly what she appeared to be...after dark. He was just expecting something else. Perception is key. You'll find your parfait! :-)
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Re. Flipping Burgers
18th Dec 2017 8:14pm
I don't know what should be more aroused, my poetic soul, or my appetite 😊👌
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Re: Re. Flipping Burgers
18th Dec 2017 8:23pm
Lol, you know, the way to a man's heart is through his stomach...
Cheddar or Swiss???
Thank you for the delicious comment AB!
JJ
Cheddar or Swiss???
Thank you for the delicious comment AB!
JJ
Re: Re. Flipping Burgers
18th Dec 2017 8:37pm
Re. Flipping Burgers
18th Dec 2017 9:00pm
Mouth watering metaphors for sure and I salute your talent in it's creation.
Well Done JJ
Yet I am left to ponder; Is it not better to await your filet mignon, rather than settle for a burger just because of a ravenous appetite? Have not so many stuffed themselves with baloney sandwiches, that when the dish which is the Coup-De-Grace arrives, the opportunity to relish in it's flavor is lost.
I realize one can only answer this question as it pertains to them, but still JJ, I feel you deserve a lavish meal.
Your friend if you will have me as such.
Teri
Well Done JJ
Yet I am left to ponder; Is it not better to await your filet mignon, rather than settle for a burger just because of a ravenous appetite? Have not so many stuffed themselves with baloney sandwiches, that when the dish which is the Coup-De-Grace arrives, the opportunity to relish in it's flavor is lost.
I realize one can only answer this question as it pertains to them, but still JJ, I feel you deserve a lavish meal.
Your friend if you will have me as such.
Teri
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Re: Re. Flipping Burgers
18th Dec 2017 9:22pm
Perhaps, but being too selective has left me starving. I can't even lift my knife and fork I am so weak... I'm gonna need a bib and a jar of baby food with someone to feed me soon...
Thank you for commenting Teri!
JJ
Thank you for commenting Teri!
JJ
Re. Flipping Burgers
Anonymous
19th Dec 2017 00:00am
Applaud your creativity on this JJ.
Sure you’ll be served with a beautiful one soon, you sure do deserve it.
Hugs <3
Sure you’ll be served with a beautiful one soon, you sure do deserve it.
Hugs <3
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Re: Re. Flipping Burgers
19th Dec 2017 00:11am
90% lean, medium-well with mushrooms, onions, lettuce, tomato, Swiss and cheddar plus 2 eggs over-medium...
Warm the buns please!!!
Thank you Sophie!
{{{Hugs}}}
<3
JJ
Warm the buns please!!!
Thank you Sophie!
{{{Hugs}}}
<3
JJ
Re. Flipping Burgers
19th Dec 2017 1:07am
dearest JJ
all your deep passion
is not wasted..
I know it a sometimes thankless profession
but you are a poet of the soul
who reaches so many with your art..
& we suffer for great poetry don't we?
without pain we wouldn't touch people
at the depths that we do..
tantalizing metaphors
made my mouth water too
for someone else's metaphoric burger..
I feel your pain here..
masterful write born of passion & ache..
love you..
Brenda
all your deep passion
is not wasted..
I know it a sometimes thankless profession
but you are a poet of the soul
who reaches so many with your art..
& we suffer for great poetry don't we?
without pain we wouldn't touch people
at the depths that we do..
tantalizing metaphors
made my mouth water too
for someone else's metaphoric burger..
I feel your pain here..
masterful write born of passion & ache..
love you..
Brenda
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Re: Re. Flipping Burgers
19th Dec 2017 1:22am
Metaphoric burgers indeed! When the title came to me I was thinking how tragically we treat each other in love, flipping lovers like houses on the realty market, raising the price on something we bought as cheaply as possible. Suddenly it changed in my head to meat instead of homes. These images just come to me from somewhere so deep I can't see into that darkness, but I can feel it in the depth of my heart.
Thank you for such an insightful comment and your warm friendship Brenda!
JJ
Thank you for such an insightful comment and your warm friendship Brenda!
JJ
Re: Re. Flipping Burgers
19th Dec 2017 1:27am
sometimes I believe we channel creativity
& we wouldn't be in tune to receive it
without the pain we suffer..
that's some deep observations
on how people so callously treat
something so precious as love..
we do pay for such clarity
some people are oblivious..
deep write dearest JJ..
love you..
Brenda
& we wouldn't be in tune to receive it
without the pain we suffer..
that's some deep observations
on how people so callously treat
something so precious as love..
we do pay for such clarity
some people are oblivious..
deep write dearest JJ..
love you..
Brenda
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Re: Re. Flipping Burgers
19th Dec 2017 1:42am
Thank you dear Brenda once again, and for the RL add. It is astonishing to me that everyone can't see what I see. I can't comprehend that every person does not feel what I feel, that people can treat each other like a commodity, like burgers and cars. A woman I asked out many years ago asked me, "what do you have to offer me?" as if I had gold necklaces or silver pieces in a sack to exchange for pleasant favors. That was the last conversation I ever had with her. Even if I had all the things she desired, all I wanted her to want was me. I don't understand how this world ever got so fucked up!
I do indeed pay for my clarity but not with gold or silver pieces, with flesh and blood, with heart and soul, with ink and poetry...
JJ
I do indeed pay for my clarity but not with gold or silver pieces, with flesh and blood, with heart and soul, with ink and poetry...
JJ