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i had a dream about you
i had a dream about you
but I’m not going to tell you
about it
I’m going to hold onto the sycamores
their leaves
get plenty of sun
today
ill hold onto fires pull the chest out
from the hidden attic
gather rocks from
under the pool
i had a dream about you
but I’m not going to tell you
about it
marielle L
but I’m not going to tell you
about it
I’m going to hold onto the sycamores
their leaves
get plenty of sun
today
ill hold onto fires pull the chest out
from the hidden attic
gather rocks from
under the pool
i had a dream about you
but I’m not going to tell you
about it
marielle L
Published 19th Nov 2017
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19th Nov 2017 11:37pm
20th Nov 2017 1:33am
There is something very sweet about this that makes me smile, yet feel a bittersweet twinge within. I think that the one you wrote it for would love to know all about that dream and that you feel so strong you wrote a poem about not revealing the secrets in your heart...
Excellent ink!
JJ
Excellent ink!
JJ
20th Nov 2017 1:40am
I wrote this a few years ago. I'm glad you caught the bittersweet, because it is
The person I wrote it for didn't deserve to hear about it. When I wrote it it was me acknowledging he didn't care/didn't deserve. Thank you for reading and the compliment
The person I wrote it for didn't deserve to hear about it. When I wrote it it was me acknowledging he didn't care/didn't deserve. Thank you for reading and the compliment
20th Nov 2017 1:43am
The chest, the fires, the pools symbolize inner longing and my own life /things I have to do for myself, and me putting my desires and feelings for the person away and moving on
20th Nov 2017 1:50am
Remember to allow your feelings to be rekindled when you are ready on your journey...
JJ
JJ
20th Nov 2017 2:39am
Yes...
A bittersweet is a perfect expression, I agree...
It hurts when you have feelings for one-
when you know that it doesn't matter..
Beautiful
Love,
-H-
A bittersweet is a perfect expression, I agree...
It hurts when you have feelings for one-
when you know that it doesn't matter..
Beautiful
Love,
-H-
20th Nov 2017 5:45am
Playful and innocent ... love the little shares that only make me want to know the rest of the dream. Well done. Also love the use of all lower case ... so e.e. cummings
21st Nov 2017 6:58pm
14th Mar 2018 3:35pm
a very beautiful poem
which speaks of desires
you'd wish to share with ****
but won't say it
in the next one please do
which speaks of desires
you'd wish to share with ****
but won't say it
in the next one please do
19th Mar 2018 5:11pm
thank you so much for saying , hopefully a new poem will come soon, when the inspiration comes
