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Dust Bunnies
Tucked into forbidden corners
the dust bunnies exist in silence,
collected scraps,
miscellaneous particles
- the secrets we shed.
Eventually,
they can't be ignored.
like mistakes,
that remind us of our imperfections.
We sweep them up,
into the trash,
onto the street.
Only to be carried back to us,
on the wind,
or in the crevice of a shoe.
Unseen,
back through the front door,
gathering again,
transformed
but still present.
the dust bunnies exist in silence,
collected scraps,
miscellaneous particles
- the secrets we shed.
Eventually,
they can't be ignored.
like mistakes,
that remind us of our imperfections.
We sweep them up,
into the trash,
onto the street.
Only to be carried back to us,
on the wind,
or in the crevice of a shoe.
Unseen,
back through the front door,
gathering again,
transformed
but still present.
Published 18th Nov 2017
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Anonymous
18th Nov 2017 11:52pm
I really enjoyed this, because it felt mystical. I loved thinking about the crazy little dust bunnies (it reminded me of Labyrinth - ever see that 80’s cult movie where all the little goblins are scurrying around?) and how they transcend into our secrets. I can happily say I’ve got a few dust bunnies myself.
Be careful with over punctuating... but I won’t go too far into that because you’ve requested friendly feedback.
Throughly enjoyable little read here. Thank you.
Be careful with over punctuating... but I won’t go too far into that because you’ve requested friendly feedback.
Throughly enjoyable little read here. Thank you.
19th Nov 2017 00:29am
Yes, I remember Labyrinth. Bowie was the Goblin King. Interesting association. And thanks for the tip on the punctuation. Just playing it safe with the criticism. Don't want to be scared away this early! ;) Thanks for reading it!
19th Nov 2017 00:16am
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20th Nov 2017 3:00am
I love your expression of "Dust Bunnies!"
So nice..!
And how the thoughts are laid so simply..
Well done
-H-
So nice..!
And how the thoughts are laid so simply..
Well done
-H-
20th Nov 2017 11:21am
23rd Nov 2017 4:27pm
I like the simplicity of this poem, yet you still convey a lot of heavy content.
Dust bunnies indeed....!
Welcome : )
Dust bunnies indeed....!
Welcome : )
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