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Universal Alchemy
I read an article
Two neutron stars collided and created gold
I understand
The meaning of my pain
Two neutron stars collided and created gold
I understand
The meaning of my pain
Published 19th Oct 2017
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Beautiful snapshot of enlightenment.
Because you've requested honest critique, I would suggest removing "and" ( extraneous ) and spacing between L3 & 4 for emphasis on a final couplet.
Very nice work.
Because you've requested honest critique, I would suggest removing "and" ( extraneous ) and spacing between L3 & 4 for emphasis on a final couplet.
Very nice work.
20th Oct 2017 8:10pm
19th Oct 2017 1:38pm
20th Oct 2017 8:17pm
Thanks for the visit... always honored to receive comments from an amazing talent!
20th Nov 2017 10:35pm
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