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I Would
If I could give you all things
Your hearts deepest desires
Your wants and needs
Your alpha and omega
Your beginning and end
To make you happier than
Anyone thinks possible
If I could know and hand
You all you dream for
I would:
No stone unturned
No expense spared
Maximum effort
Even sell my soul
I would:
I love you more than any good thing
My passion and servitude mingles happily
I worship your very existence
In my eyes you can do no wrong
Even when you are clearly doing wrong
I love you unconditionally; always have
If you asked me to die for you
I would:
Seems what I have to offer
Plainly isn’t good enough
As your eyes roam elsewhere
You have broken my heart
Oh so often; but I repair it
Moving on still in love
Even now would I try to stop you leaving
I would:
I know I am a fool
Acting all foolish
lost in the fullness
of my foolishness
A door mat to be trodden on
Somewhere to wipe your feet
And no matter what you do
Would I still love you always?
I would:
I would:
I would:
Your hearts deepest desires
Your wants and needs
Your alpha and omega
Your beginning and end
To make you happier than
Anyone thinks possible
If I could know and hand
You all you dream for
I would:
No stone unturned
No expense spared
Maximum effort
Even sell my soul
I would:
I love you more than any good thing
My passion and servitude mingles happily
I worship your very existence
In my eyes you can do no wrong
Even when you are clearly doing wrong
I love you unconditionally; always have
If you asked me to die for you
I would:
Seems what I have to offer
Plainly isn’t good enough
As your eyes roam elsewhere
You have broken my heart
Oh so often; but I repair it
Moving on still in love
Even now would I try to stop you leaving
I would:
I know I am a fool
Acting all foolish
lost in the fullness
of my foolishness
A door mat to be trodden on
Somewhere to wipe your feet
And no matter what you do
Would I still love you always?
I would:
I would:
I would:
Published 11th Oct 2017
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11th Oct 2017 5:46pm
Sadly love can become an mental addiction, harder to break away from then any physical one. Love, like all else, has it's pros and cons.
Nice write from the heart
Nice write from the heart
12th Oct 2017 1:20am
sometimes it has more cons than pros :-( Thank you for the read and wise words :-)
Anonymous
11th Oct 2017 6:28pm
It takes two to make things work and love alone sucks sucks sucks. There is so much pain wrapped in your words here. No matter how much we do, how much we give, how much we try...alone it doesn't work and it hurts like hell. Beautiful write, so filled with emotion. Sending so many warm hugs!
12th Oct 2017 1:24am
we fool ourselves and that is never good in the long term :-( Huge Big Hugs :-)
11th Oct 2017 7:25pm
Emotional and raw piece David, good work! As always, many hugs.
The use of repetition here is quite smart. Not just in the reiteration of "I would", but also this chunk; "I know I am a fool
Acting all foolish
lost in the fullness
of my foolishness"
Nicely done!
The use of repetition here is quite smart. Not just in the reiteration of "I would", but also this chunk; "I know I am a fool
Acting all foolish
lost in the fullness
of my foolishness"
Nicely done!
12th Oct 2017 1:28am
I take this as deep praise indeed from a wordsmith such as yourself :-)))))) thank you much :-) Hugs :-)
11th Oct 2017 8:11pm
12th Oct 2017 1:29am
especially so when you live with it for over 30 years :-( thank you for the read and your understanding :-)
Anonymous
11th Oct 2017 8:30pm
Bear hugs Brother
12th Oct 2017 1:30am
12th Oct 2017 00:04am
The softer side reigns supreme. Always a sucker for it, myself. Love this David. <3
12th Oct 2017 1:32am
at least somebody does (lol) thank you - so glad you loved it :-) - Hugs ;-)
12th Oct 2017 00:56am
12th Oct 2017 1:32am
12th Oct 2017 3:57am
I hope someone was on the receiving end of this majesty; the meter and rhythm blew me away and pushed me through the whole piece as if your heart was actually writing it...beautiful.
12th Oct 2017 4:16pm
it's an honest write, she may read it, she may not - she doesn't usually read my poetry :-( thank you for the read and so many kind words :-)
Anonymous
12th Oct 2017 5:40am
David, my friend....certain poems get one word from me, this falls into that category...for future reference the one word means "heart was just crushed by the weight of these words and the understanding of them...mouth left agape with no other words...killing me but outstanding ink....good gaaaahds" and that one word is:
Eeesh....
xoxo Taryn
Eeesh....
xoxo Taryn
12th Oct 2017 4:19pm
Hey I can live with "eeesh" - if it is not ourselves I think we all know somebody that is affected and usually hurt like this :-( Thank you for the read and your understanding :-) Huge big Hugs :-)
12th Oct 2017 10:28am
oh dearest David your love is so beautiful
& perfect you are no doormat
just a fully feeling soul full of heart..
love & hugs Brenda
& perfect you are no doormat
just a fully feeling soul full of heart..
love & hugs Brenda
12th Oct 2017 4:24pm
sometimes I think I should have been a nastier, unloving person, an alpha male so called - but then I have met many a so called alpha males mainly in the boxing ring and very few got past the 3rd round (lol) - I am a lover not a fighter as they say but i would always make exceptions for the loud and aggressive wannabe alpha males :-) Massive warm Hugs :-)
For love..... in all it's many forms, one of the most tormenting,is that which is so freely given to another--unconditionally, from the depths of one's heart and soul--but remains, unreciprocated.
David...you so surely penned this piece with your heart pinned to your sleeve. The poignant, bitter-sweet pain, of your beautiful soul, is so palpable. And as a reader, thru the bolding of each stanza's final line, i am able to experience the honest depth of the poet's desperate, ultimate attempt at proving commitment.
My friend, i ache deeply inside--for you....and for all those who have suffered similar relationships! Tight...caring...humongous HUUGGSS on their way to you!
David...you so surely penned this piece with your heart pinned to your sleeve. The poignant, bitter-sweet pain, of your beautiful soul, is so palpable. And as a reader, thru the bolding of each stanza's final line, i am able to experience the honest depth of the poet's desperate, ultimate attempt at proving commitment.
My friend, i ache deeply inside--for you....and for all those who have suffered similar relationships! Tight...caring...humongous HUUGGSS on their way to you!
12th Oct 2017 4:28pm
thank you so much for such a caring response - I am honoured :-) Huge Massive Huuuuuuuuugggggggggggssssssssss :-)
13th Oct 2017 3:27pm
To be adored so! You’re affection for another, regardless unrequited, is an exceptional declaration to the complexities of the human heart <3
24th Oct 2017 2:48am
what a beautiful comment - sorry I missed this and taken so long to respond :-) thank you my friend :-) Hugs :-)
