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Know Me?
Does anyone
Ever truly
Know the
Mind of
A friend?
My friend
Thought
She did
So I cut
Off her head
Just to
Prove her
Wrong
Realising that
My proof was
Invalid because
She was dead
And I had
Proved
Nothing
So I took
Two friends
And in front
Of one I cut
The other
One’s head
Off in front
Of them
Three friends
Without heads
Now don’t
Even know
Their own
Winds
Published 10th Oct 2017
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10th Oct 2017 2:17am
dearest poet this is intense
I feel like you may be angry
with your friend for not truly knowing
& understanding you..
~Raven
I feel like you may be angry
with your friend for not truly knowing
& understanding you..
~Raven
10th Oct 2017 5:08pm
strangely at the moment this doesn't apply - it was one of those poems that just feel out of me - even with friends there is always the unknown :-) thank you for your kind comments and concern :-)
10th Oct 2017 3:38am
Is one truly considered a friend when this "friend" is unwilling to truly understand the hearts?
Had a similar experience as well [although not sure if this is what you mean by your write] but yes...it gets quite frustrating...
Had a similar experience as well [although not sure if this is what you mean by your write] but yes...it gets quite frustrating...
10th Oct 2017 5:10pm
it's exactly what I meant by this write - people tend to make assumptions, even friends :-( It's not a current situation but I know it's a common problem :-) thank you for your kindness :-)
10th Oct 2017 3:47am
Ok David, right about now I am glad there is an ocean between you and me, my friend. Lol.
Thank you for the write.
Thank you for the write.
10th Oct 2017 5:12pm
(lol) No poets were harmed in the writing of this poem :-))))))) thank you my friend [ does an evil laugh ] :-)))))
10th Oct 2017 5:40pm
10th Oct 2017 4:41am
Brutal and succinct! I love the liberties we can take through poetry to explore these dark themes. Well done :)
10th Oct 2017 5:14pm
I was trying to make the beheadings metaphoric - in that telling friends the truth sometimes it leaves them reviewing what they believed to be true :-) thank you for your kind comments :-)
10th Oct 2017 12:27pm
Are you for hire? I have a few friends in serious need of a head cleaving...
Doctor's orders...
Just call me Dr. J
Doctor's orders...
Just call me Dr. J
10th Oct 2017 5:25pm
I am for hire and I work cheap - I always stay a head of my victims :-))))))))))))))))))))))) - Yes Doctor! thank you my friend :-)
10th Oct 2017 5:29pm
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10th Oct 2017 2:03pm
I would never presume to know your mind. But I will gladly hear what you have to share. And I'll keep my head on my shoulders, if it's all the same to you, thanks. :) Giggling hugs :)
10th Oct 2017 5:32pm
no friends were beheaded in the writing of this poem so worry not :-) made you laugh though :-) Big Hugs :-)
10th Oct 2017 5:04pm
dearest David this humorous & with an edge
I know I will never know everything about you
but am ever so grateful for what you share with me..
love & hugs Brenda
I know I will never know everything about you
but am ever so grateful for what you share with me..
love & hugs Brenda
10th Oct 2017 5:34pm
sweetest Brenda there is very little you don't know about me, just the way I would want it :-) friends is friends :-) Huge Big Hugs :-)
10th Oct 2017 7:49pm
Curious, when did the third friend loose their head? I only heard two thwacks of the cleaver. Interesting write and thought provoking. I suppose you can only ever know a Friend as well as they allow you to.
10th Oct 2017 8:27pm
you make my point exactly about friends :-) what makes you think I would stop at three:-) (lol) thank you fro reading and getting it :-)
12th Oct 2017 00:07am
This why I have to keep the mystery going. lol. This made me smile, David. <3
24th Oct 2017 2:56am
sorry I missed this comment - thank you I am always happy to make you smile :-))))) Huge Hugs :-)
