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Revolution begins here
The shuffling masses
With rose tinted glasses
The brain washed sheep
The elite has put to sleep
Suicide is painless
So say the brainless
Give them an I-Phone
Give them a video drone
Drug them with greed
Then on each other they’ll feed
The elite control their fate
By filling them with hate
They encourage sheep rage
Then let them out of their cage
But it’s rage at the wrong people
Aimed at another tribe of sheeple
They heap hate on one another
Race, religion, creed or colour
Anything to divide and rule
With fear being their favourite tool
You have lost the battle and the war
You’ve forgotten what love was for
When the slaughter comes and come it will
Sheeple will kill sheeple at will
Until there are only enough left
To run the machines and serve
I am glad to be old enough, I won’t see it
All revolution is internal: I choose to be it
Published 23rd Sep 2017
| Edited 24th Sep 2017
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23rd Sep 2017 2:01am
This would make some BITCHIN slam poetry! :) Excellent to read aloud, and sticks it to the man!
24th Sep 2017 8:24pm
I love sticking it to the man (lol) I used to do slam poetry but when I lost both my legs I kinda lost my nerve - ( thank you I am glad you enjoyed it :-)
23rd Sep 2017 2:14am
Excellent couplets, lots of truth here and love the flow! Very well done.
24th Sep 2017 8:25pm
23rd Sep 2017 3:43am
Really enjoyed this, would personally put the first stanza after the third. Would change the overall tone some for me. Keep them coming David.
Thank you for the write.
Thank you for the write.
24th Sep 2017 8:27pm
thank you Robert I liked and used your idea - you were correct :-) Glad you enjoyed it :-)
23rd Sep 2017 3:55am
Great rhymes, flow and realism! Loved it, I'd give my left nut to have penned this!
JJ
JJ
24th Sep 2017 8:29pm
Ok! send me your left nut and it's yours (lol) thank you for the compliment :-) Never had one like that before :-)
Anonymous
23rd Sep 2017 4:36am
That last stanza is pure power! The entire piece just builds and builds until you hit that stanza and I was grinning like a fool. Great big wiggly hugs for you!! ☺
24th Sep 2017 8:30pm
24th Sep 2017 7:07pm
No but our children and grandchildren will see it, that's the sad part.
I've never understood how others think suicide is a cowards act. It actually takes great courage to end the contrast of this lifetime. Although I have read there comes one moment in each suicide that regret screams out that final second of Life.
Another thought provoking write, David.
I've never understood how others think suicide is a cowards act. It actually takes great courage to end the contrast of this lifetime. Although I have read there comes one moment in each suicide that regret screams out that final second of Life.
Another thought provoking write, David.
24th Sep 2017 8:34pm
You are so right - As a teenager I swallowed a bottle of pills to end it all and then I felt that regret and had to crawl to a neighbour. takes guts to achieve it :-) I am sad for my children and grand children maybe they will find the answers :-) thank you wise lady :-)
8th Oct 2017 2:39am
Although the words were chilling and stark, I feel blanketed in warmth at the Truths you reveal here David!
Love the stanza separations, and the impact that creates within each verse!
After reading this earlier this week, I had the opportunity to share -Revolution begins here- with a loved one, who felt greatly comforted to know they were not alone. Thank you for such a revolutionary piece ;) Very timely.
Love the stanza separations, and the impact that creates within each verse!
After reading this earlier this week, I had the opportunity to share -Revolution begins here- with a loved one, who felt greatly comforted to know they were not alone. Thank you for such a revolutionary piece ;) Very timely.
8th Oct 2017 3:04am
thank you so much for your kind words - there's a growing number of people that are beginning to really see what is going on in the world - a lot of the things I write about is trying to make people think and make those that can see that they are not alone Tell your friend that I think the only good revolution is the one that starts internally then moves outward to others :-) I write in all genres but some poems are for me and others I am sure you will see which ones they are - you already have :-)))
