*** Senryu

The last three lines are classic! Reminds of that idea I once, many years ago thought was odd---that so many people can feel isolated in a city with so many people.

Nicely done 3 senryu to make up one poem. My favorite the last one also.

It's beautiful and ethereal. I feel the solitude. I picture your form floating in the water, along the path of the moonlight. Second stanza, closer, the breath held by your form. The third pans out for me. Takes in the whole of the poem and the scene.

It reminds me very much of when I swam out into the ocean to die, many years ago now. Shark hit me in the toes and I had a sudden change of heart. A romantic death at sea had become more horrific. lol

cold swimmer under a cold cold moon;
the city has seen so much it takes no notice.
intrinsic beauty, almost delicate...

The sheer beauty and depth here is mind blowing. Gorgeously written, good flow. Breathtaking Vee, simply breathtaking.








~anonshadow

HI Vee. I know little about this style of poetry or Haiku therefore I cannot be objective however i do see the beauty inherent. My own poetry takes a different course  and still needs refining As with this Senryu I aim for an economy of words.Kexby

You paint the picture of loneliness very well my dear, just hoping it's creative n not
factually based...

The imagery vividly comes to life as if painted using the strokes of an artist brush. Wait a minute, poetry is art. And what a beautiful piece you have painted. Bravo poet!

Trifecta