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Man.
Mere puppet in God's hand
It's whole life is planned
Always a part of rat race
Its chase ends in disgrace
It leads a worthless life
Always engaged in a petty strife
Love is one futile attempt
Which eventually breeds contempt
Born to suffer and cry
Death is always lurking nearby.!
It's whole life is planned
Always a part of rat race
Its chase ends in disgrace
It leads a worthless life
Always engaged in a petty strife
Love is one futile attempt
Which eventually breeds contempt
Born to suffer and cry
Death is always lurking nearby.!
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Re. Man.
30th Aug 2017 3:28pm
Very true words hat make one ponder the ultimate question, why are we here? Apparently o amuse god. But how amused can a god be when he wrote the script and knows the ending?
And why exactly do we play our parts, knowing our fate is predetermined?
Gee thanks, I'm gonna be thinking about this all day now... lol
Welcome to DUP Scribbler!
JJ
And why exactly do we play our parts, knowing our fate is predetermined?
Gee thanks, I'm gonna be thinking about this all day now... lol
Welcome to DUP Scribbler!
JJ
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Re: Re. Man.
30th Aug 2017 3:48pm
Thank you. Your comment made me think .. What if the divine is not so divine after all?? People call me pessimistic but maybe I am closer to reality.
Re: Re. Man.
30th Aug 2017 4:15pm
A little bit of pessimism is healthy. Blind faith is mind control... I want to believe I have some choice in life, but I also like to blame god for my mistakes. JJ
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Re: Re. Man.
30th Aug 2017 4:30pm
Yeah.. scepticism is good..and yeah it's good to have someone you can blame for your mistakes..:)
Re. Man.
30th Aug 2017 3:47pm
Re: Re. Man.
30th Aug 2017 3:49pm
Re. Man.
a blues song indeed...we create our own suffering...best thing to do is put that energy into art...as you have...then it is released...as long as it is genuine..it will have a place at DUP...-J
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Re. Man.
31st Aug 2017 8:25am
love your poem. interesting message, and really like your structure and rhyming skills. Nice work
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