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Marauders
Can you hear the pipes and drums
Something riotous this way comes
Rolling in like storms of thunder
Makes their foes shake and chunder
Now shitting, in their English pants
We show our tusks like elephants
Our claymores sharp, just like our wit
If you don’t get slashed you might get bit
For a highland man will make you dead
With his sword, his fists, his feet his head
Cunning as the wolf, ferocious like the bear
He’ll take your life and scalp your hair
And your widows will surely weep
With all their men we’ve put to sleep
Mourn not the bloody bodies, we love the smell
The devil's on our side, we came to raise hell
We’ll leave absolutely no one alive
It’s better for you if you don’t survive
Ten thousand English troops is that your fuckin lot
Watch 1,000 mad Scots take everything you’ve got
Your right to tremble, you’ve been sold a lie
Your generals know you’re all gonna die
When the pipes fall silent, we’ll take you apart
When the drums stop so will your heart
No point in running
No point in hiding
We hate cowards the most
Written by
David_Macleod
(14397816)
Published 18th Aug 2017
| Edited 19th Aug 2017
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Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 00:04am
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19th Aug 2017 00:49am
LMFAO - only you could make such a superb comment - brilliant :-) :-) :-)
Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 00:17am
ZOINKS! And I thought we were on the verge of a civil war... what the fuck is going on over there David?
JJ
JJ
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Re: Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 1:02am
LMAO - 400 years of servitude will eventually spill over into murderous mayhem (lol) or maybe not ? thanks for the comment that really made me smile :-)
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Anonymous
19th Aug 2017 00:23am
Accents...kilts...Highlanders...this girl is a puddle at this point. Fierce and proud piece. Dare I hug a fierce Scot? Please? 😊
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19th Aug 2017 1:06am
It's a strange thing about highlanders - come the fight, even now, I would be on the front line ready to do battle. It is the ultimate honour to die valiantly in battle, no matter what - all it takes is the pipes and drums and the battle cry :-) Big Scottish Bear hugs :-)
Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 1:49pm
i have a Highlander fetish ltm no jokes, that's confessed here on my profile... Scottish history is a bit of an obsession too,
so really love this one d.
can a poem be braw? yea, braw poem indeed.
you tell those wee red coated nyaffs lol
#ninjakittyhugs
so really love this one d.
can a poem be braw? yea, braw poem indeed.
you tell those wee red coated nyaffs lol
#ninjakittyhugs
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Re: Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 5:10pm
can a poem be braw? (Yup!) you are braw, your comments are braw, your poetry is well passed braw :-) Loving #ninjakittyhugs Sending # warmhighlandkiltyhugs :-)
Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 6:16pm
Ha! My Scottish blood is applauding! My father's people migrated to and from Aberdeenshire, and my mother's people did the same to and from the Isle of Skye. We actually visited them when we lived in England. I'll never forget the smell of the ocean there in those shores.
Okay, because you're my Scottish brother, I'll have to suggest some edits from da clan! I was trying to jiggy my way through but kept tripping!
Rolling in like a storms of thunder
^a storm or just storms
[Their] now shitting, in their English pants
^ clears throat
He’ll take you life and scalp your hair
^ You life? Yo! You Life, Bro!
Mourn not the bodies, of blood we love the smell
^ This line was not only awkward, but messed up the rhythm of the piece; stuck out like a sore thumb. How about something like this:
Mourn not the bloody bodies, we love the smell
The devils on our side, we came to raise hell
^ devil's
I know some are just typos and the like; however, I owe it to Scotland to ensure their bloody war cry is perfect!
:D
Okay, because you're my Scottish brother, I'll have to suggest some edits from da clan! I was trying to jiggy my way through but kept tripping!
Rolling in like a storms of thunder
^a storm or just storms
[Their] now shitting, in their English pants
^ clears throat
He’ll take you life and scalp your hair
^ You life? Yo! You Life, Bro!
Mourn not the bodies, of blood we love the smell
^ This line was not only awkward, but messed up the rhythm of the piece; stuck out like a sore thumb. How about something like this:
Mourn not the bloody bodies, we love the smell
The devils on our side, we came to raise hell
^ devil's
I know some are just typos and the like; however, I owe it to Scotland to ensure their bloody war cry is perfect!
:D
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Re: Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 8:17pm
now that's what I call a critique. not only that it made me laugh and smile :-) It's all sorted now and reads so much better. I love critiques like this, I don't always adopt them, but your suggestions were all spot on - thank you lots :-) My family originated for the Isle of Lewis - I am David Macleod from the clan Macleod and I am immortal :-)
Re: Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 8:31pm
That's a relief to know, David. You never know how people are going to react to a critique.
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Re: Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 11:50pm
I always react to critiques the same way. I still have a lot to learn and critiques like that will only serve to help me improve. please feel free to critique any or all of my up coming poems I welcome any and all input :-)
Re: Re. Marauders
20th Aug 2017 2:18am
Then why the hell aren't you in our Honestly Crafted Critique Group? [nonsense]
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Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 11:39pm
Bannockburn? Well I would be fucked for being a mixblood. Scotch Glasweegie dad, oirish Belfast mother and born in Essex..............and brought up in west Yorkshire.
I can still paint my knackers blue tho, we are all celts together before tedious Christianity infected our beautiful pagan shores......
Great write, its unfortunate we will never get over the infighting. Boudicca would have sorted this shit out.
I can still paint my knackers blue tho, we are all celts together before tedious Christianity infected our beautiful pagan shores......
Great write, its unfortunate we will never get over the infighting. Boudicca would have sorted this shit out.
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Re: Re. Marauders
19th Aug 2017 11:57pm
You look Scottish - your bloodline is Scots / Irish that's good enough for me. I totally agree on the pagan comment :-) I might run from Boudicca (lol), but then,.........No surrender, no retreat is policy Thanks for the comments and the like bro :-)
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Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 00:22am
My dear friend David...I have to bow my head and look up with the saddest eyes....I have NEVER been one for history of ANY kind....something with my brain didn't ever connect...that being said, the only thing I "can' say is this made me think of Braveheart...a movie, whether fact mixed with fiction or not held me captivated by their pride and til this day is one I will watch over and over (to date I want to say a minimum of at least 250 times easily...that also being said may make me look like a complete asshole but I am what I am....
xoxo taryn
xoxo taryn
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Re: Re. Marauders
20th Aug 2017 00:34am
you are a million miles away from an asshole - I watch "the green mile" over and over again its my favourite movie. there is something about the pipes and drums, it has an effect I can't explain - goosebumps, hair standing up on the back of my neck and a feeling of invincibility - it's the strangest thing :-) Braveheart is a very good movie :-) Big Scottish hugs my friend :-)
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Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 4:38am
I adore you David!!
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