[ SK ] Get on with it

Firstly, I'm so happy to see you working on your King series again. This body of work deserves to be completed and between ILLUSTRATED * nudge nudge *  pages.

You've cut down to the essence of the entire series by highlighting the fact that they believed without challenging choice. I don't know about you, but I always felt like Linoge was one of the most underrated villians in a King movie.  But definitely the most believable.

To some it may serm a typical King poem,  but there is something profound and deeply disturbing about the ending. The repetition of "every single day" three times, as though the Holy Trinty.

Like King, you infer between lines the loss of a child, themed through other works of his like Cujo and Pet Semetary. The parental devastation is felt through the emphasis of the repetition. Or maybe because I've seen it and can relate.

The reference to The Stand was a great inclusion as well.

It would take me an hour to highlight your mastery of assonance and consonance. The lyrical nature of this had me reading the repetitions like a chorus, and while the rhymes should appear simple, they're actually quite complex and carry the rhythm through like a gavel, or sand in an hourglass falling one minute at a time until 30 were counted.

As always, I'm in awe of your ability to compress an entire novel, movie, or series into a succinctly structured poem. I've read it a dozen times and can't find one thing I'd suggest revising.

It would be akin to removing a bar of music from the sheet, thus opening a trapdoor for the rest to follow.

This was written to music and I am glad to know that its lyrical nature   carried over the writer / reader barrier. As for the music itself, I can't even remember it at the moment. I haven't had enough coffee yet this morning to fuel all the neurons. necessary in retrieving it. I might never even get it back. Linoge was underrated indeed. Mostly because he allowed everyone to be victimized by their own beliefs and walked off into the moonlight unscathed as well as victorious. Fear prevailed over Desire  allowing Evil to put its boot on Good's neck, as depicted with the townsfolk wrestling Mike Anderson to floor. As always, your Critique is Honest and thorough and probably took longer to compose than this submission, which was written in a matter of minutes.

What got me about that series was how easily Molly gave in with so much to lose. That was a perfect demonstration by King of how fearing something will be the very thing that causes you to lose it.      
   
King is a master of visual metephor, thus poetry written regarding his works must equal it to be effective. Yours never misses the mark. It's like King is one of your literary soul mates.

Well, I discovered his books almost 30 years ago. Hopefully he'll discover my poetry.

You can count on that.

this is awesome. *tips hat*

Thanks for the read.

I completely agree. I also think the moment you start fighting the devil he tried even harder.