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Technical distraction
On the edge of society
Observing the overwrought
Random aspirations
To electronic indifference;
Disjointed theorems
Express their irrelevance.
Lost in the comfort
Of ecstatic indulgence
Our conversations
Eventually become...
Empty and meaningless
Narratives.
Disrespecting of the dreams
Of the sedated masses...
Observing the overwrought
Random aspirations
To electronic indifference;
Disjointed theorems
Express their irrelevance.
Lost in the comfort
Of ecstatic indulgence
Our conversations
Eventually become...
Empty and meaningless
Narratives.
Disrespecting of the dreams
Of the sedated masses...
Published 16th Aug 2017
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16th Aug 2017 11:09pm
the meds sure do a lot of talking nowadays. insincere, lost rhetoric they conceive
16th Aug 2017 11:09pm
I cant apologise for being a self indulgent whore. composed of nature and nurture decline. this was me, but a portrait I never etched.
17th Aug 2017 1:00am
The only suggestion I'll make is that you change "disrespecting of the" to just "disregarding the" in the penultimate line. JMHO, of course. I like this poem a lot. Its rhythm is catchy and flowing, and it paints a powerful picture of modern ennui.
Anonymous
17th Aug 2017 3:52am
Welcome to DU K! This is a great start here.......very thought provoking........every time I read it gives me different thoughts........enjoyed.....purple luv & hugs xo :)
19th Aug 2017 2:49am
boy oh boy you hit the nail squarely on the head with this power filled write - your standard is very high :-)
