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Especially for You
If posies of roses
Were blown from our noses
I’d happily pick one
Especially for you
If our fate is a date
I hope you’re not late
It’s dinner and dancing
Especially for you
The bliss of first kiss
I don’t want to miss
The kissing and hugging
Especially for you
My heart will impart
Like a piece of fine art
Unconditional love
Especially for you
I bring you this ring
Pulling on your heart string
Such a wedding I’ve planned
Especially for you
You elbow a blow
Your answer is no
I plead and I beg
Especially for you
Sad case with no grace
Your face I’ll erase
I bought me a shotgun
Especially for you
Published 16th Aug 2017
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Anonymous
16th Aug 2017 6:08pm
Ouch! You always twist that ending just enough to throw me off my guard. Sneaky wordsmith, you! :)
17th Aug 2017 5:41pm
LOL - I very nearly left it without the twist as a soppy love poem, but I couldn't resist :-) damn the voices in my head (lol) thanks and Hugs :-)
Anonymous
16th Aug 2017 6:22pm
Go from awwwww how mushy to MUSH!!! BLAM !!!!
Priceless !! Lol
Priceless !! Lol
17th Aug 2017 5:42pm
16th Aug 2017 6:47pm
Haha they shot you down so you were only trying to tell them you deserved a shot. Nice ending!
17th Aug 2017 5:43pm
a shot in the dark maybe (lol) thank you I am glad you liked the ending :-)
16th Aug 2017 7:00pm
Hey....hold on here!! Just when i was beginning to wax all romantic...and sympathetic for the poor narrator you throw in your special, signature finale--unexpected turn of events that leaves me saying, what the hell?!?! (although, by now.....i should know better---unexpected should be EXPECTED!! (LOL) )
But,my Friend, this is just one of the reasons that i enjoy your poetry so much....why i continue craving your crafty creations...keep coming back for more!
But,my Friend, this is just one of the reasons that i enjoy your poetry so much....why i continue craving your crafty creations...keep coming back for more!
17th Aug 2017 5:44pm
I am really touched that you think that. get's me all warm and fuzzy :-) thank you for your kindness :-) Big Huge Hugs :-)
16th Aug 2017 7:17pm
well that gives new meaning to shotgun wedding
o.O
it's kinda romantic in a weird, snuffy way lol
dig it d
xo
o.O
it's kinda romantic in a weird, snuffy way lol
dig it d
xo
17th Aug 2017 5:46pm
Bang - bang, he shot me down, Bang bang,........ (lol) I am pleased you dig it :-) Hugs :-)
16th Aug 2017 10:05pm
The first stanza had me rolling with laughter! Then it got all "Pulling on your heart string" mushy. But then, as you always manage to do, you made me fall on the floor in laughter... or was it the bang at the end that got me?
I wish I could write like you David, I need to relieve the pain more often!
JJ
I wish I could write like you David, I need to relieve the pain more often!
JJ
17th Aug 2017 5:48pm
always more than happy to cause laughter, kinda makes it all worthwhile :-) and don't sell yourself short, your poetry is awesome and easily as good as mine, if not better :-)
Anonymous
17th Aug 2017 00:15am
David...KABOOM! Tranquil and serene from the start with a bit of humor lingering in the background to end with an unexpected bang! Loved it!
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
17th Aug 2017 5:49pm
17th Aug 2017 1:50am
David, you had me thinking this was all awe! and then I was like BITCH! lol. gre at write my friend. <3
17th Aug 2017 5:50pm
Thank you - I am always pleased when you like what I write - kinda makes my day :-)
