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[ fAwL ] Temple of Trust
Through the Arts, healing
Hearts on the mend;
silhouetted against stained glass
kneeling in morning glories of
Sun Dust and Daisy Fanfare
---we worship together
in the Temple of Trust
where Lover and Best Friend
and all those in between
weather the storm
brought about by
unresolved feeling
unseen
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Re. Temple of Trust
13th Aug 2017 9:29pm
Re: Re. Temple of Trust
13th Aug 2017 9:33pm
💜 I wasn't sure that it was a complete enough poem. It felt like I should be saying more. Or that could be just because I write few poems this short.
Re: Re. Temple of Trust
13th Aug 2017 9:55pm
I write lots of short poems and nearly all of them feel like I should be saying more. This one says just the right amount. It feels like it's open ended to make the reader reflect and I see that as a good thing.
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Re: Re. Temple of Trust
Sometimes we feel our Love offerings just aren't worthy of those we Love, no matter how long or short.
But, I Love You is just three little words that convey the world. And this poem is a small, secret meadow of Sun Dust and Daisies that does as well. 💜
But, I Love You is just three little words that convey the world. And this poem is a small, secret meadow of Sun Dust and Daisies that does as well. 💜
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Re: Re. Temple of Trust
14th Aug 2017 2:10am
Re. Temple of Trust
14th Aug 2017 1:23am
Well done! Because the future is unseen, this poem has to be left just drifting in its closing part. What I like about this piece are mainly the images you depict, the connection between the lovers, and the concerns regarding the relationship's continuity. The poem flows nicely and is very eye-catching even if u are just skimming through the first lines. Congratulations!
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14th Aug 2017 2:13am
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14th Aug 2017 6:18am
Re. Temple of Trust
14th Aug 2017 5:38am
This one touched me and brought tears to my eyes. I agree with those above that this needs nothing more.
Except for a missing "u" — silhouetted
Except for a missing "u" — silhouetted
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Re: Re. Temple of Trust
14th Aug 2017 12:10pm
Thanks, PS. LOL I never get that word spelled right, no matter how many times I check the dictionary.