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Though the maze
Through the maze
of uncertiantys
through the pain
and the fear
through the valley
of broken promises
and the friendships
they wear
on the banks
of wishfull thinking
with your bridges
burning clear
you slowly start
to wonder
why
am i here
of uncertiantys
through the pain
and the fear
through the valley
of broken promises
and the friendships
they wear
on the banks
of wishfull thinking
with your bridges
burning clear
you slowly start
to wonder
why
am i here
Published 6th Sep 2011
| Edited 7th Dec 2015
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7th Sep 2011 00:22am
typos: 1. uncertiantys as in uncertainties
2. freindships as in friendships
3.wishfull as in wishful
Another thing, shouldn't it be instead of 'though', 'through'?
Before i leave this comment i'd suggest you edit your poems so as to bring out the meaning you wish to convey to the readers to the fullest. Your poems , as far as i read, are profound and at the suitable length but the thing is, that you don't express your
ideas properly.
2. freindships as in friendships
3.wishfull as in wishful
Another thing, shouldn't it be instead of 'though', 'through'?
Before i leave this comment i'd suggest you edit your poems so as to bring out the meaning you wish to convey to the readers to the fullest. Your poems , as far as i read, are profound and at the suitable length but the thing is, that you don't express your
ideas properly.
7th Sep 2011 5:21pm
thank you for telling me about my spelling
you forgot to tell me about my grammer
i should have stayed at school
a bit late now
so you can understand the fun i'm haveing
trying to do an ebook
anyway
my poems/sayings
it is not ideas i wish to show
it is seeds i wish to grow
in the barron lands were the children weep
for better days that was promised
please feel free to reply
you forgot to tell me about my grammer
i should have stayed at school
a bit late now
so you can understand the fun i'm haveing
trying to do an ebook
anyway
my poems/sayings
it is not ideas i wish to show
it is seeds i wish to grow
in the barron lands were the children weep
for better days that was promised
please feel free to reply
