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A glass of Coke ( bagatelle )
I stared into the fire few drinkers at the bar
talk of school and rugby; the oval ball not for me
but listened by the fire, its crackling comfort,
a box of logs and sticks drying for tomorrow.
A glass of Coke ( Monday is my 'dry-day' )
chatting with Di' who's drinking tea.
Could have stayed home
not risked slippery roads,
but the thaw was set, at least tonight,
Home again to plan tomorrow,
where to go and what to eat.
talk of school and rugby; the oval ball not for me
but listened by the fire, its crackling comfort,
a box of logs and sticks drying for tomorrow.
A glass of Coke ( Monday is my 'dry-day' )
chatting with Di' who's drinking tea.
Could have stayed home
not risked slippery roads,
but the thaw was set, at least tonight,
Home again to plan tomorrow,
where to go and what to eat.
Published 23rd Jul 2017
| Edited 25th Jul 2017
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Anonymous
23rd Jul 2017 11:09pm
The scene you presented here Mr. kexby is calming, unhurried and with that the lines fall into the next easily. I like how you referred to 'tomorrow' couple of times in this poem, very casually although there are so many elements in here that ties the scene so well together.
Thanks for calling Vee. it is the ordinary of the day ,the importance of tomorrow that fills our lives the mortar of society. Life is an event without end.
As I began writing I had no Idea of the poems direction; hence it had no direction , Bagatelle a title Beethoven used many times in his piano works some more powerful than the symphonies.Listen to the blackbird on an evening no planning, singing because it seems to be the right thing.Many of my poems are bagatelles.
As I began writing I had no Idea of the poems direction; hence it had no direction , Bagatelle a title Beethoven used many times in his piano works some more powerful than the symphonies.Listen to the blackbird on an evening no planning, singing because it seems to be the right thing.Many of my poems are bagatelles.
24th Jul 2017 9:31am
talking of sports
& drinking for the warmth not given by the hearth;
it's a well structured scene...
& drinking for the warmth not given by the hearth;
it's a well structured scene...
24th Jul 2017 11:27am
You are right John about warmth not given by the hearth the tea the coke and talk of sport made the evening ( many times )Thanks for calling.Kexby
5th Aug 2017 4:46pm
Simple observation no comment no opinion the 'everyday' that is the mortar holding life together Thanks for calling Kexby
